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New Family

by wartyizer 4 Reviews

Carlisle confronts his family over what he has done.

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: G - Genres: Drama - Characters:  - Published: 2009/09/25 - Updated: 2009/09/25 - 1225 words


  • New Beginnings

    (#) ladysavay 2009-09-25 07:46:00 PM

    A good beginning but the chapters were way too short. Also, you really need a beta or editor or you need to read this out loud to yourself. You have a lot of missing words, incorrect phrasing and poor or wrong word choices.
  • New Beginnings

    (#) GinnyMyLove 2009-09-29 07:30:45 PM

    I love twilight and harry potter but almost always despise true crossovers.

    This one has me hooked though. Agree on needing a beta though
  • New Beginnings

    (#) anakhuskerfan 2009-10-03 09:20:53 PM

    Good start, I really love Harry Potter fanfic and liked Twilight but for some reason never liked crossovers between the two. This story though is very interesting and I cant wait to see what happens in it. My only question is why does Edward still feel that Carlise stole their souls? I thought he got over that when he turned Bella. Can't wait to read more, update soon!!
  • New Beginnings

    (#) keegan 2010-05-23 10:35:03 AM

    Fuck you and the horse you rode in on. This is a completely retarded cross, not to mention gay as hell. Post on where horse shit like this is appreciated.

    Author's response

    Why don't you fuck off and pull your head out of your arse...its appears to be stuck up arrogant little fuckwit!

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