What really happens when an abused teen reaches his breaking point? Rated R for language and violence. People get killed in this story, and real-life teenagers cuss (or curse, for our british fri...
- BRILLIANT, BRILLIANT, BRILLIANT!!!!
This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time. Interesting, unique, well written, and thought provoking everything a good story needs it provides. I loved how Harry handled Hermione, the marginalized Ron, how he came into his powers, the paring was also a massive plus (Luna/Harry/Hermione all the way).
The only disappointment that I felt throughout the whole story was the lack of the protective father moment that you hinted at. I would have loved to see your take on the over used cliche of an overly protective father.
Thank you for posting this epic tail. it's so refreshing to see such a brilliant story play out, it reminds me why I fell in love with this fandom to begin with.
I wish you the best of luck and hope that you get many reviews. I will also be looking forward to reading any other writing you post.
(#) martelcris 2009-12-15 06:08:20 AMWonderful!
One of the best stories I've read.
I'm only a little conflicted on the last chapter, the "do yourself your own epilogue" style is good, but the feeling of something unresolved remain.
A follow on story will be most welcomed (please).
In every sense an outstanding work, light years better than the chicken crap that the last two Rowling books are.
I'll be waiting for your next works.
Author's responseThank you. (And agreed on the last two R books.)
(#) Quackpotty 2009-12-16 01:10:26 PMGreat story, though it didn't feel complete, as though it needed another 27 odd chapters. Can you write them? Please? ^_^ Anyhoo, thanks for the story! Harry did seem a little infallible in the story, as though he could do no wrong and that Hermione is full of error needing Harry to bring her back to the light (as though it wasn't the other way around constantly in canon) but the story was fun regardless.
The story made me think quite a bit outside of the box, and I liked that fact. Critical thinking is something that I could do with a little more, and it was nice seeing someone writing about it in a Harry Potter fanfic (fanfics where logic is normally ignored). Unfortunately, though, critical thinking isn't without it's own pitfalls. Basing your theories and conclusions on opinions isn't supposed to be part of critical thinking, yet it happens. That final scene with Hermione, Harry, Luna and Freddie talking about idealism did ignore fact and focus on opinions (about police/aurors and what types of people they are) taken from popular belief. It isn't fact. There are more than two types of people in the police and other government careers. Even in your own story you had a third type - Moody was different. Oh well, unless you have all the personality tests and career records of all these people, you could never do an accurate bit of critical thinking. So you have to have Facts rather than popular belief and opinion upon which to base your conclusions ie, critical thinking is intrinsically flawed as you can't, in reality, always get all the facts.
Ugh, sorry for the long rant. I'm sure that you can join my fingers in hating me for typing all that out. I saw on your profile that this isn't the only story that you've got, yet this is the only one you have uploaded here on this site. Is there an chance that you can leave a link that will guide us to where we can read any other fics of yours?
Author's responseThank you for your insightful words. I agree that we all could use more critical thinking in our lives. Yes, we definitely have to have fact to base the thinking on. But the only facts available to Harry were his own life experiences. So while you or I may not have developed the same opinions, Harry growing up as an abused teen that everyone took advantage of can certainly be expected to end up with some views of the world that some of us would consider skewed.
So instead of "What is it like?", I posit, "What if?", and that's my take.
BTW, in case I wasn't clear, I have written and published many things, but this was my first fanfic. I hope to have more, as time permits.