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Low-Cal Diet

Not too sure what to rate this as. There's a lil' curse word inside (the "A" word); as well as a smidge of violence at the end. If the rating should be higher, lemme know and I'll change it. But an...

Category: Humor - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Angst, Horror, Humor - Characters:  - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2006/04/18 - Updated: 2006/04/19 - 997 words - Complete

Reviews

• Low-Cal Diet

  (#) Ithilwen 2006-04-20 04:26:06 PM

  This would be a lot easier to read if you fixed up the formatting. Ficwad seems to have eaten some of your tabs. ...Ficwad needs a tab-free diet!
  
  "Underbelly" is one word, but dark and plastic? Unique.
  
  Do you mean "tapped" or "taped" to her mirror?
  
  I think "fatass" is one word too.
  
  "Its" does not need an apostrophe.
  
  Hmmm... Where to post this indeed. Have you considered Horror? A few foreshadowy tweaks to the earlier portion and it would fit right in. If I were you, I'd allude to the idea that the woman's eating habits kept her body well-padded, but not say what those habits were. This isn't a humor piece, really, though the quirky last line would close it off nicely.

• Low-Cal Diet

  (#) Queenessofmyworld 2006-08-08 06:35:47 PM

  um...ok SHE ATE THE GUY????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!! wow ok thats really creepy i might have night mares you know...but actually it was really well written but very creepy...very...creepy.................

  Author's response

  What can I say...I'm a fan of red meat. >)
  Glad you enjoyed.

• Low-Cal Diet

  (#) Girly Girl 2006-12-25 09:20:52 AM

  She ate him! ewww!
  How...ewww!
  But I guess it wasn't a bad story...just grose.
  :-)

• Low-Cal Diet

  (#) Dirk 2007-09-13 05:51:44 AM

  LOL I loved it. The descriptions of the woman were vivid and made me laugh. I have to admit, I didn't see the end coming!

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