- wow that chapter made me think a lot
a hell of a lot!
it was fuckin' amazing! the writing is pretty mind blowing (seriously half of my brain is plastered against the wall :P)
i want to know what the family is like and wether it's all fake or wether they generelly are beutiful people but WHO KNOWS DUN DUN DUNNNN
update soon loverly ^^
xoxo Lottie oxox
Author's responsehahaha, what can I say 'm a shotgun sinner:P I'm very happy with your comment, like ego-trippin':P Because this is really something I want to sink my teeth into, how it is to be a 'foster fuck' aka Frank. What it's like to be all alone and all you can so is suck it up and hold back. You reaaaaally made my day!
(#) BandiitMarie 2010-03-25I really like this story. I like how you are explaining everything. I like your writing style, its different. I think this story is very original, and I like how it puts me right there, like i m right next to frank. i love the metaphor your using too. I think reading this story makes me WANT to write. Before with my story I was getting sick of writing and updating, and to see what you are creating her, helps me tell myself. Well I should want to create too.
I also like that banner you have for your first chapter, its cool. I thought about a banner for my story but I never made one, and its a tad too late haha. I really hope to see an update soon! I think i figured out my problem with my story. I update like everyday, and I feel like if I updated like maybe 3 times a week, or something I would have better chapters. what do you think? I want to know your opinion :)
Author's responseFirst of all, thank you^^ I know what you mean with being sick of writing, I really need to have a drive, motivation and like someone to tell me: WORK, or read a story taht gets me inspirated. If I don't have such feeling I hsouldn't even try to write because everything will be shitty anyway.
And about the metaphors I use, I'm kind of forced to use 'em. English is a second language for me and at school they never paid much attention to teaching us that well. So fanfic pretty much opened my eyes and gave me a larger volcabulary. And my grammar is bad anyway because I have dyslectia. So I really need to fiddle with wors and give a bit weird metapores to exlaim what my characters feel because I don't want to fall in repeat, using the same words and using metafors keeps it kind of light and sarcastic and I like that.
Hey and if you'd like I could make you a banner, I love toying with pictures and such, i've done a lot of 'banning' for my own stories and for others, so lemmy know if you're interested.
P.S) this site is really BAD with reviews isn't it I really don't get ANY review alert or story alert or chapter alert or anything.
(#) BandiitMarie 2010-03-26Wow you would do that? that would be awesome to have a banner made by you i saw some of your stuff on Deviantart and its amazing! Really you write so well I thought English was your first! I like the metaphors, they are new and i like them.
Yea i think motivation helps make the chapters better, i just need to get all my bearings, because i have strayed a tad too far from serial killer and are out of my element! So i gotta reel back into it.
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