(#) jabarber69 2010-04-10nice little chapter, except for the rape part....and there is the part where he is letting them get away with it, I would have let them get away with it at all....
Author's responseThank you. That's an interesting question. I only had Harry say he'd convinced the authorities to leave the Dursleys alone. There's nothing to say he himself, won't be doin' a little revengifyin'. On a side note, I despise rapists so much that I think a rapist should be thrown into a ten by ten cell with a three hundred pound gorilla named 'Bubba' with an 'I heart Nascar' tattoo on his chest.
Harry will be pulling some underhanded, but perfectly legal moves to make the Dursley's lives hell.
- Excellent chapter, but Hermione and Luna better have a little talk with Harry about force choking...... he might not become a Sith, but evil can snag anyone if they aren't careful! On the other hand, he hasn't force choked anyone who doesn't deserve it! I'm looking forward to seeing Harry teach Luna and Hermione how to use the force and lightsabers! Maybe Dobby could learn too! He's about the same size as Yoda! :)
Author's responseHeya Teresa.
I think this is the last time he uses that particular trick. I look at it like a police officer using a tazer instead of a gun. As you said, he only used it on those who deserved it. In each of those cases, Harry could have stopped his 'victims' hearts without being caught.
Moreover, this version is not 'dark' per se, but he has been shocked in to awareness by Dumbledore's allowing Vernon to beat him to death, and is not unwilling to use some darker methods in order to force through the changes he promised in chapter two.
As you've seen, Luna will get to play the part of Jiminy Cricket.
Dumbledore will most likely decry Harry as an up-and-coming dark lord simply because Harry isn't obeying his every whim.
You are quite correct. Hermione, Luna and Dobby will all be playing. Unlike most house elves, Dobby has an independent spirit, and a fierce loyalty to Harry. And yes, due to his size, his lightsaber will be very much like Yoda's.
- Heh, that was a fun chapter as Harry manages to sever a few more of Dumbles' strings on both him and Hermione as well as start the process on several Order members. I can easily see Luna, with her particular insights, becoming as much a part of Harry's conscience as Hermione already is; after Hermione, she's clearly his best female friend and I suspect Neville will, if he hasn't already, take Ron's place. I don't know that Harry will be totally happy about this but I think he will see it as necessary and, after fourth year, I doubt the links with Ron are as strong as they used to be.
I can see Harry having several private, but totally legal, means of harassing the Dursleys (have to wonder how much of Gurnnings he owns) that'll give him needed revenge without darkening his soul. I do have to wonder if his stated intentions at the station were enough to crash and destroy the remains of the wards around Privet Drive? That could have some very interesting repurcussions in the near future. It would be "educational" to watch Harry's response if Tom & Co. attacked the Dursleys.
Regarding Harry vs. Dumbledore, I quite expect Dumbles to do all he can to paint Harry in a negative manner simply because Harry's now his own man and not Dumble's tool (the "less that full fingers wave" was a nice touch; that Dumbles didn't recognize it was funnier yet). From what's gone before, this is clearly going to be a most vexacious summer for Albus as Harry gains a lot and Albus' every effort to control him goes wrong and drives him farther off. If Harry returns to Hogwarts in September, things will likely get very colorful indeed.
I thought Harry handled helping Hermione quite well (that the compulsions were reapplied is, I agree, quite telling) and 'twill be interesting to watch the "dance' as they move to deepen their relationship. With what you've dropped of her father's background, I suspect he's going to be recruited to help train Harry & friends physically and, if there's a way, in the mindset necessary for combat and then returning to the "normal" world. I rather suspect Hermione's mother is going to be there in other equally supportive ways and all will be better for it.
It's a shame Harry had to reveal his House rings so early, but sometimes necessity drives actions, even if they aren't what you'd consider optimum. I rather expect that news of this will -not- improve Albus' disposition. Then, again, I rather suspect little of this summer will improve his disposition; especially if Harry, as the new owner, refuses to let the "Friends of the Flaming Fowl' again use 12 Grimmauld Place as a headquarters (couldn't blame him, wouldn't want -my- home used that way by folks I didn't particularly agree with). Even after the move to Potter Castle, I'd still leave the Black London Home locked against all but those I strongly trust.
Author's responseHello, Cat. You are one of my favorite reviewers. Whenever you write, you always give some great input and I frequently ask myself, ~/Damn! How did he guess that so early!?!/~
Though this is intended to be a Harmony fic, You're right. Luna will get to play the part of Jiminy Cricket. Hermione will be a bit shocked for some time to come at the radical changes in her world view.
Ron/Neville: In some ways yes, and in some ways, no. Neville is not going to take Ron's place as best mate, but Harry is going to break through Neville's shell and bring out the true Gryffindor that's inside. Ron will also be joining, but I'm writing him very much canon. He's got a good heart and many dreams, but he's lazy and unmotivated.
Yes, Harry has some hard times ahead for the Dursleys. Not even Jiminy is going to object. As for how, you'll see in chapter 6. By the way your guesses are very close.
Your guess about Albie is also right on the money. See more in chapters 6&7. I'm glad you liked his little Yoeman's wave. (Send me an E-mail and I'll tell you how that came about.)
Dumbledore's summer is going to be filled with unpleasant surprises, and the school year ain't gonna be much better!
Harry and Hermione will actually be pretty straightforward. They've known each other for five years now and the jitters are all but gone. As I said in my intro, the naughtiness is not a focal point in this story, so anything they do beside some snogging, will be off-camera.
Dr.&Dr. Granger: It was actually unintentional but my sister FireLemming (See her account at DevArt) suggested that I needed to get them to safety, as Voldemort would torture and/or kill them to hurt Harry and Dumbledore would kidnap them to force him back, so, yes, they well be involved...and in the manner you've suggested.
Again correct. Harry didn't want to reveal the rings, but he needed to convince Moody. This version is slightly more politically savvy and a lot more willing to use underhanded methods. He's also building a cadre of people with skills he needs, to help him.
Unkl' Albie won't be getting any information for the time being. (Tune in next chapter, to see how.)
12 Grimmauld. Basically correct, but Harry will wait until the vote of no-confidence to spring that on him. (chapter 8)
Until next time...
- How'd I guess that so early? Well, I'm a 58-year old reader who remembers a lot of what he's read (both fiction and non-fiction) and has enough imagination to see where things could apply.
I don't expect too much on-camera naughtiness from Harry & Hermione, but I wouldn't be surprised to see them occassionally turn up a bit "rumpled", sometimes unexpectedly. I suspect they'll find better places, but I could see them making a determined effort to evaluate every broom closet in Hogwarts - and then make the information generally available after they graduate. I can see that causing most "interesting" reactions among the staff. I could also see them doing this without getting caught due to their abilities.
A "vote of no confidence"? I wonder who'll be springing that on Albus, the Wizengamot or the Order? Either would be quite the "kick to the head' or "kick to the privates" (whichever would hurt Dumbles the most) and springing more on him would then add further insult to his injury (much like rubbing a heating rub on a highly bruised area). Viscious? Who, me?
Author's response58, huh? Well, you're only ten years older than me, and like you, I remember pretty much everything I read see or hear. It's not he wonderful gift most think it is.
Yes, they'll spend some 'quality time together and sometimes turn up a bit rumpled, but I'll let you guess where later.
The vote is for Fudge, not Dumbley, but I've arranged things for him too. Evil Chuckle!
- BTW, do I want to know how Fawkes got a phial of red pepper sauce, was able to hide it, and then was able to give it to Dobby when needed? That raises a lot of questions about Fawkes, his real intents, his bonds to Albus, and just how much he's really capable of. I suspect that and the fake contract are just going to cause Dumbles further headaches down the road; depending on what potions he's working with, I can see the substitute "blood" causing some "interesting" interactions.
Author's responseFawkes and the pepper sauce is one of my favorite pranks when I write.
Given the underhanded nature Dumbledore shows in canon and the varying from 'benign-but-stupid to 'end-of-the-line-downright-E V U L' persona he can become in fanon,I have a hard time understanding why a phoenix, a creature said to be firmly aligned with the goodness and light, can stand to be near him. Unless said phoenix has a wicked sense of humor. You'll see more of his humor in chapter six, I believe.
Since the fake contract has no blood/magical signature, on it, it's just a piece of parchment with some pretty writing on it. Further, Arthur is rethinking his position on Dumbledore's character so I doubt he would allow it anyway. The same thing applies to anything Ol' Twinkles 'suggests' for Ginny.
Molly may object, but Arthur is the head of the family and while he rarely uses that power, he does have it. I wonder if the contract ever did get signed, would it end up in Guadalajara? Snicker
(#) kurotatsu72 2010-04-13When Ron asked how Harry had nearly beaten him in chess, you had Harry mention Sabacc. Umm...Sabacc's a card game. The only board game I've seen in Star Wars is called dejarik (yes, it's the one Chewie and R2 were playing on the way to Alderaan).
After McGonnagall's reaction to finding those compulsions on Hermione, I wonder how many she's under.
Keep up the good work!
Author's responseAccording to 'Han Solo at Stars End' by Brian Daley (1979), Sabbacc is a combination of luck, skill, and strategy. Reminds me of chess.
Also I didn't know the game R2D2 and Chewbacca were playing even had a name.
McGonagall is under quite a few, but the time hasn't come to let her go. That comes much later.
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