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Chapter 5
14 reviewsHarry goes to Grimmauld place, gains another elf, does some cleaning, some creating, and Hermione comes over to play. He visits Gringotts and gets into a fight. Rated for the Gladiator stuff.
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JEDI POTTER
(#) starboy454 2010-04-17
this is a very very very good story i can't wait to read moreAuthor's response
I thank you, and there will be more on the way.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-04-17
Well, he most definitely has the goblins on his side now by his demonstrated abilities, let alone the ones he made rather wealthier. It's going to be amusing to watch Albus' reaction when he runs up against this (though he may get an inkling of what's to come if he sees beforehand how the goblins great Harry - then again, the demise of griphook might tell him that things aren't as good as he thought. The bit with Hermione was nicely handled, enough to know the basics of what transpired (they obviously became far more intimate, perhaps even to know each other in the biblical sense as her tenderness would indicate) but without more detail than that (leave it to the readers' imaginations - more fun that way). I admit, I had to chuckle at the name of the Healer employed by the goblins; with a last name like that he was obviously destined to be a healer, much like a certain television doctor from some years back with the same first name. BTW, is the new sword going to be a second "Sword of Gryffindor", a "Sword of Potter", or some other name? my own thoughts would be that a name meaning justice in an old tongue (say, Welsh) might be appropriate.
He managed perfect crystals the first time around? Damn, he got excellent training and instruction and is going to be a most dangerous adversary once he's trained. I can't wait to see Hermione's surprise when he demonstrates that he can use the Force and wield a lightsaber. her subsequent reaction should be quite colorful and entertaining.
I did love what Fawkes did with those devices of Dumbles'; here's hoping it takes him a long time to discover them missing, such that he'll have no clue to who took them, where they are, or why. I got to thinking, I can see why Fawkes would have, somewhere, a phial of red pepper sauce, it makes sense that a bird of fire would enjoy hot food ( if he leaves Albus and joins or journeys with Harry, I can see him insisting on finding a restaurant with some exceedingly hot and spicy food). Is Fawkes going to be a silent help to Harry or is he going to supply him with intel before Fawkes finally breaks with Dumbles?
I agree with you about Hollywood's accuracy, or lack thereof, regarding swordfights. I've known several folk in the SCA, as well as other venues, and I've heard plenty about real sword fights. Besides, I wouldn't expect Hollywood to show any more accuracy there than they do with firearms and their accuracy there is a running joke.Author's response
Yes, the Goblins are now firmly on his side. Not only because he promised them roughly one third of the gold in Britain, but because he was able to meet one of their warriors, in fair combat and defeat him, using only the tools his foe had. He held to their traditions, treated Griphook like a fallen warrior, not as a criminal, and forgave the trespass against him, with the very public 'rite of absolution'. That kind of thing goes far.
I usually show the goblins, as being like a combination of the Ferengi and the Klingons, having a rigid moral code, and sticking to it, assiduously. Unfortunately like the Ferengi's 'Rules of Acquisition' the humans don't agree with that moral code, and so, pretend they don't have one. Easy to do. I believe I made mention of that in chapter three.
Dumbledore is due for some very unpleasant surprises, both when Sirius' will is read, and later on in the year, when he'll get a lot more dumped in his lap.
Sigh! I'm showing my age. Marcus Caduceus is based upon Marcus Welby Md. I developed him for another LOOONG piece I'm having difficulty with right now, so I use him wherever I need him.
Sword of Gryffindor, Mk II: I hadn't actually considered it. Since he's going to be using a lightsaber, Both the original SoG, and the new version will be hanging in his bedroom. Whenever he goes to Gringotts, he'd be required to don the breastplate and sword, as his badge of rank, but otherwise, it's just a blade.
Hermione: Yes and yes. I normally write smut, As several people have mentioned, I'm very good at it, but it wasn't needed as part of this story, so I kept it off screen. As you said, it can be more fun that way.
Lightsaber Crystal: It was necessary for Harry to manage the perfect crystal the first time, because I had him leaving school on the 24th of June. He has less than two weeks from the time he gets to Grimmauld to build the thing and practice enough to make building it worthwhile.
...And Yoda is a Jedi master, after all.
Hermione will see Harry in brief action just after they have a little chat...in chapter 7.
Drowning trinkets: Dumbledore has only himself to blame. He has far too many things keeping watch on Harry as it...was.
Fawkes: I believe Fawkes is kinda stuck with Dumbley until he dies. He had to have been at least mostly good when they bonded, or they wouldn't have bonded, but he's slipped from the path since then. His firm belief that he and he alone is wise enough to decide the fate of the world, and his refusal to keep any counsel but his own, are both sure signs of dementia.
Perhaps the reason Fawkes stays despite Dumbledore's actions, is that he feels that without him Dumbledore could become as dangerous as Palpatine.
I recall seeing a story somewhere which had Harry feeding Fawkes a treat made of Jalapeno's from the third drawer on the right side of Dumbledore's desk.
All that aside, I intend to have Fawkes lend the helping talon every now and again, especially for things Harry couldn't have anticipated, such as the blood in chapter 4 or the 'impending-loss-of-virginity' alert he dropped into the lake.
Having been a police officer, and having served with both the Navy and the Marine Corps, I am all too familiar withe the terrible speed of a gunfight. Believe me, the time dilation Harry felt, made him think the fight lasted hours, where in all, not more than six or seven minutes passed. I also was closely tied to SCA in my misspent youth, though I preferred the 1600's.
I also hate 'the six-shooter with fifty rounds' thing. More, I hate how Dirty Harry (or anyone else) can cap off rounds at will without having to fill out the eleventy two forms and reports.
Thanks for your review.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-04-17
Further thoughts: I loved the negotiations with Dobby & Winky as well as the dispatch of Kreacher; he earned what he got but I thought it proper of Harry to honor his loyalty to his mistress.
The dealings with the goblins were nicely handled, especially the most grievous charge against Griphook, that he took the money he was responsible for out of a profitable investment plan and earned as little with it as he could; I can see that as a quite heinous crime among the goblins. I like your depiction of the goblins, much as you advised another author, a combination of the best of the Klingons and the Ferengi.
It'll be interesting to see just how much damage that discussion with Andromeda Tonks does. The obvious, of course, is what's going to come out of Harry's discussions with the lawyers, especially if Dumbles has been interfering to prevent them from talking with him earlier. That'll just dig the hole a bit deeper. What I'm wondering about is how that discussion will affect Andromeda's attitude and behavior toward Dumbledore and how the change will be evaluated by others. I can just see her, Augusta Longbottom, and Amelia Bones sitting down and discussing "The Dumbledore Problem" before dealing with demoting him anywhere and everywhere they can. Under the right circumstances, he'd be lucky to remain Headmaster, let alone the remainder of his titles. I think that'd be the best revenge in some ways, remove him from his power and his glory and leave him to live by himself without visitors, syncophants, or minions. Of course, what would happen to Severus Snape in the course of this is something else, most likely something quite unpleasant for that unpleasant wizard.Author's response
The elves: As I explained in chapter 4, they need the bond to remain healthy...and Harry is a soft touch where Dobby is concerned.
Kreacher: While he couldn't help being bound to such lunatics, he did make the choice to betray Sirius. He's also an unacceptable security risk. Being as he's attached to Harry, as chattel, he can go anywhere Harry is, and while he is bound, both his actions in OotP and Dobby's in CoS, indicate to me that house-elves are far less constrained than most wizards think.
Goblins: Yeah,I had to come up with a crime so heinous it would open their eyes. They are a warrior race, but they've been relegated to controlling wizarding Britain's monetary supply.(Which is really a stupid idea. See: the art of War, by Sun-Tzu.)
Since they are in charge of the wizarding world's banking, what better way than to intentionally fail to make them money. Since the gold is drawing interest, they aren't making any money from investment percentages. (Hurt the bank, you hurt the clan. Hurt the clan and you hurt your family.)
This will also count against Dumbledore, as Griphook was operating on his orders.
Augusta, Andromeda, Amelia and Harry's new solicitor Carolyn, are going to prove to Dumbledore to be as irritating as a tropical disease. Dumbledore uses the laws to get what he wants, but he's never come up against a truly competent attorney before.
They will be sitting and discussing that very problem, but it's going to take time. Since he's so politically and culturally powerful, what I intend, is to begin to whittle away his support before handing him an anvil. As much as I would love to chuck him into Azkaban, I can't, for three very good reasons. First is the 'Old man's mistakes' line he loves to use, second is that everybody in Britain sees him as infallible, and third...will be shown several chapters down the line.
Don't worry about Snivellus. I have something very very unpleasant set in store for him!
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
(Sorry!)
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Teresa 2010-04-17
I enjoyed seeing Harry take out Griphook and set up a firm alliance with the Dag. It was also nice seeing him settle details with Andromeda and the others! Fawkes definately rocks; his disposal of that little trinket and then visiting his friend in Japan gives him plausible deniability! (snicker) I keep seeing an image of Dumbles puttering along as usual......and then the Anvil chorus playing in the backgroud just as the first one hits! Thanks for this chapter!Author's response
Thanks, Teresa.
I feel Rowling did the goblins a huge disservice in making them out to be the money grubbing, backstabbing traitors they appeared to be in book seven. Until then they at least seemed to have code of honor.
Fawkes has to have something to keep himself sane given that he lives with the 'omniscient one'. An odd sense of humor would be just the ticket.
'The Anvil Chorus' will be playing soon enough.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) jabarber69 2010-04-17
Now that chapter was OUTSTANDING! the fight scene one of the best I've read....and yeah fights scenes especially involving guns are ridiculously done in hollywood, a six gun that shoots 20 or more bullets and for someone that lived in an era that they used a gun not only for self protection but also to feed themselves how then they could shoot 20 or 30 rounds at their opponent and barely miss them especially when they only made what 30 month and shells cost money, is stupid....Author's response
Thanks, Jabarber. I take it you liked it.
Yeah, I've been in firefights far too many times and they are always over very quickly...except to the people involved, and then they seem to go on forever.
Worse than that is the guy who hears the gun fired and ducks, to avoid the bullet. I mean, the average speed of a .45, cal bullet is 800 fps. That's more than the speed of sound (628fps at sea level)
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Wolfric 2010-04-18
I am enjoying your fine story. I hope your sister recovers. Thanks for writing. W.Author's response
Heya Wolf.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and I'll pass on your kind words.
Go to her account at DevArt, and find out why she's such a well respected artist.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Cateagle 2010-04-24
I was re-reading this chapter and that scene where Harry returns to Gringott's lobby and the guards start honoring him reminds me of the audience of "The Jerry Springer Show" when he comes out; they chant "Jerry! Jerry! Jerry!" and the goblin chant in the story just resonated with that. Mind you, I don't normally watch it, but happened to catch it while channel serfing one day while home ill; daytime TV is a great incentive to get well and return to work.Author's response
I was thinking more of the traditional three salutes of the Roman army upon the arrival of a seasoned warrior or gladiator. In any contained society gossip travels fast.
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) twistyguru 2010-04-30
ah, blood on the sand!
gotta love it!Author's response
"So, do you like movies about gladiators?"
BWAHAHAHAHAHAH!
AlorkinJEDI POTTER
(#) Bukama 2010-05-20
So far this is one very good fic.
I noticed a tiny mistake in the testing question for Remus.
Harry's boggart was a dementor not Voldemort.
Please take as long as you need to help your sister. Family comes first after all.
Author's response
Thank you for you kind words.
No mistake. While Harry's greatest fear is Dementors, his question was: “What form did you expect my boggart to take?”
In PoA, Remus told him he didn't want Voldemort to appear in his classroom.
Good news. My sister FireLemming has been released from the hospital. She's doing as well as can be expected and better than anticipated. Still, helping a prideful, stubborn older sister do the simplest of things takes all my day. Never fear, the next chapter is almost ready.
Alorkin
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