- Seems like a rather fair assessment of everything. I'll be interested in how the "short-term" relationship will work out; With a Harry who's more focused and less of a doormat, I suspect the problems he has with her will be much lessened.
No complaints about any of the clichés that may or may not have been in there. Everything fitted together well enough.
Author's responseThe H/Hr relationship will not be a major focus of the story.
- A good, solid start that avoids a lot of cliches. I'm going to be right interested in seeing how -this- Harry deals with various events, especially if the older, greyer, Harry blended with him brought back enough useful information to make things more "interesting" for those who would use or attack Harry. I'm definitely looking forward to more.
I should note that I gave a "Huzzah!" when I saw a new story by you.
Author's responseThe problem is, I started this almost a year ago, and some things I thought new and interesting have turned up in other fics since then. Still, I think its a fun little fic
- "That's a shame"
Oh, grow up. I'm quite fond of H/Hr myself, particularly DrT's mature and calm take on it and HHL in tales less explicit than ReOrdered, but I'd rather see T continue to explore and grow as a fanfic writer, and thus continue to give us the benefit of his writing. Or need I remind you that he shut down, nominally for good, a year or so ago? Maybe now we see why.
T, you've explored the spaghetti western and technowarrior in "Galleons"; will it be Ninja!Harry this time? His laidback style, as glimpsed in this one chapter, suggests that approach. Not Naruto-style blow-shit-up, but silent traceless and 'accidental' death (we saw a little of that in Chance and Twin iirc), like in Blot's Reunion and DW's HPLifeLessons.
Or maybe I'm totally off on my guess. That's fine; just write it. Even your earliest stuff where you were finding your voice is enjoyable to read. Pray continue.
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