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Immortal Fangs Book II

Harry's first year at Hogs in the Immortal Fangs Universe. Not for Snape lovers

Category: Harry Potter - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Crossover,Fantasy,Humor - Characters: Bellatrix,Harry,Lily,Narcissa,Snape - Warnings: [?] - Published: 2010/05/18 - Updated: 2010/05/18 - 3820 words

Reviews

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) Nightwing509 2010-05-18 07:04:20 PM

  I like the way you had Bellatrix warn Flint & the others if they aused trouble what would happen to them.

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) PuckSilverbreeze 2010-05-18 09:04:27 PM

  It just fits the way I understand Bella

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) thekev 2010-05-19 01:50:48 AM

  Great start but I'm confused gonna hit your site to see if I missed something from the first time

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) Warlocke 2010-05-19 03:15:00 AM

  Should of
  Would of
  Might of
  Could of
  May of
  
  None of these phrases are correct. If you ever HEAR someone say them, they are either cracked in the head, or they are actually using the contraction for "have".
  
  Should have (should've)
  Would have (would've)
  Might have (might've)
  Could have (could've)
  May have (may've)
  
  Example from your story: "...I would of feared you..."
  
  Remove the "would" and you get: "...I of feared you..."
  
  Does that make sense? No.
  
  Now try it with "have" or its contraction: "...I would have (/would've/) feared you..."
  "...I have feared you..."
  
  Do these make sense? Yes, yes they do.
  
  And keep an eye on the rouge/Rogue thing; you slipped once, but it's clear it was a typo, not a lack of understanding, so kudos to you.

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) Qellar 2010-05-19 04:59:19 AM

  ??
  
  Rechecked book one and only found 5 chapters so am wondering if you had actually finished book 1 with more then 5 chapters. Will check your yahoo site.
  
  

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) marshall88 2010-05-19 07:27:42 AM

  love this story

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) lycus 2010-05-21 10:26:03 AM

  This is a good chapter, and besides some grammer mistakes. you have made a good return. And now that you are writing again will we see you update Oaths of Fantasy? And I am wondering who will be the unlucky person who has to face an angry Harry Potter.

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) ChiVayne 2010-05-21 04:18:28 PM

  Always nice to see something new from you.

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) RAJR 2010-05-22 03:49:27 PM

  I enjoy the story thus far, but I am a tad bit confused. In your first fic of immortal fangs, I recall a mention of Narcissa, but that was all it was. In this story, she is not only mentioned, but also a participant. How did she come into the picture when she wasn't even involved directly in the first story? You might want to focus on completing the first story, so the continuing stories make sense. Other than that, the story is well written, and an interesting read. Keep up the great work!

• Immortal Fangs Book II

  (#) Destroyerdrt 2011-12-07 12:13:14 AM

  Is this an AU or a true book 2 for the Immortal Fangs story? Also if it is a sequel why post it before you finish the main story?

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