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  (#) zamia 2010-06-21

  Good to see the old sorting hat get a run. Looking forward to when Harry & the gang start putting their training to use, maybe even stirring Dumbles up a bit more? Good read. Cheers.
  Z

  Author's response

  It's getting complicated now, with the different characters all demanding air-time. I've always seen the Hat as someone who enjoys a prank, just to stir things up. (or maybe he's just drunk.)
  
  I have about two chapters before Harry&Co. start to practice and half a dozen before this comes to a head.
  
  Two or so chapters from now, Dumbledore will learn what the prank Harry and the hat played, and shortly after that, will get a nasty surprise.
  
  Thanks much.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) vheritas 2010-06-21

  Not a slow chapter at all!
  I'm looking forward to whatever the Hat is involved in, and more of Dumbles being shat on, so to speak, from all sides.
  Keep up the excellent job.

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  (#) Vanir 2010-06-21

  Entertaining, intriguing and involving. Harry does feel a bit distanced though. There's very little about his internal workings in this chapter and they are rather vital to understanding what he's about. I loved the Hat interaction, the duel with Patil and the thing about the prophet, too. However, your name for HBP was new to me and perfect...
  
  Thanks a bunch, and have a donut.
  
  Vanir

  Author's response

  Thank you, thank you, and thank yeeewww!
  
  This scene was more to advance the timetable and to introduce or reinforce items that will come into play later. I had so many things to get out and so little space...
  
  I felt it necessary to show how a parent might not want to allow his children to vanish for so long. That the twins are girls and the Hindi place a great deal of value on chastity, only helped to set it up.
  
  HBP, truly sucked, so it's appropriate.
  
  Mmmmmmm! Donuts!
  
  Homer..Erm, Alorkin

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  (#) erik 2010-06-21

  Another well written and interesting chapter.

  Author's response

  Thank you, Eric.

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  (#) Teresa 2010-06-21

  I enjoyed reading this chapter very much; especially Harry's party and his interactions with the Sorting Hat and Mr. Patil. I know that you've chosen the core instructors but I think that he could be an impressive guest lecturer/teacher! Of course he'll have to recover from that bout with Harry and the "discussion" with his female relatives! Like Mackenzie he could give the students a first hand lesson of what it's like to be facing a skilled and intelligent opponent. While many of the DE's have been relying on shock tactics and larger numbers there are a few who have knowledge and talent to back their fighting skills. The young jedi might have an advantage in training and weaponry but things can change quickly during a fight. That's why I think Mackenzie's gift was an excellent idea, and perhaps Harry should consider making sure that all the jedi carry something extra in case of accident. There's nothing wrong with a little touch of paranoia, and to misquote Obi-Wan " any type of weapon can be your life! " I also liked reading about Harry's meeting with Euwings and his plans to point Rita and her pen in the proper direction. Actually though, if Hermione was able to figure out her secret during the tournament, it's possible that Dumbles might know too. He might look into bug removal just in case. On the other hand Fawkes and Dobby might make sure she gets plenty of info without taking to many risks! It's nice to see how Fawkes and Luna are bonding! It's also good to see Neville and Susan getting together! Awwww.......Voldy and his migraine make such a perfect pair! After all, Harry and Hermione had to try out those birthday presents! By the way, is Bill working with the son or grandson of a certain Indiana Jones? Anyway, thanks for another fun chapter! :)

  Author's response

  Thanks. this is a little break from being the instigator of a national revolution, to being a happy teenager.
  
  If I can, I'll get Rahjit to do a guest shot. I do hope he understands what the ladies are telling him.
  
  For the most part, he's going to be busy running his business, International Exports,(Snarf!) but he can send and receive mail to his daughters, through the rather unique mail service he has running. A letter to Harry wouldn't be a problem. I'd also like to have Arthur and Filius do the same. All are combat veterans, of one form or another, and all are trustworthy.
  
  ~Like Mackenzie he could give the students a first hand lesson of what it's like to be facing a skilled and intelligent opponent. ~
  
  At the very least, he can teach the more advanced students to defend themselves against spell casting opponents.
  
  I agree. The Deez rely on overwhelming force and forbidden curses, but cowards run in packs. One on one, they're not much. Unfortunately, there's always the exception that proves the rule. Snape is reputed to be very handy with a wand, and apparently Lucy, the Lestrange brothers and the Carrows are all considered to be among the more deadly of duelists. Of course, Alecto is a little indisposed jsut now. I understand she and Bellatrix are on an 'around the levels of Hell' tour of the afterlife.
  
  Mackenzie/Obi Wan: I can truly appreciate the functional necessity of carrying a knife. Obi Wan's warning is actually where I got the phrase I used. I'd heard it before, but my first DI, wasn't nearly as polite.
  
  I take your point though. I think I can have Harry spring for a few dozen good blades. Mackenzie can teach them the basics of knife fighting along the way. On the other hand, they have a full plate as it is, and the battle is expected to be short. I dunno. Maybe both.
  
  Euwings/Rita. I do have a method of forcing Rita to behave herself. It'll appear soon.
  
  Again, I agree. Dumbledore has to know Rita is an animagus. If he's so informed on the castle and it's occupants, how could he miss such a security leak? Especially since he uses the elves and portraits to spy for him.
  
  Harry has learned to be a bit manipulative and so you might see him using terms similar to those of the Ol' Twinkler. I'll keep those to a minimum.
  
  Yes, Dobby and Winky are going to be the 'sources close to...' Fawkes will help when he can, but his role is to stay low and keep an eye specifically on Dumbledore. I'll also have the hat report what he hears, if Fawkes deems it important.
  
  Awwww....Voldy: Somehow, I just can't find it in myself to be sympathetic. Maybe I can get him addicted to headache remedy?
  
  Henry Jones: At this time, Indy would be around a hundred years old, so it could be Mutt, or possibly Indy himself, assuming he's still capable. After all, he went toe to toe in Crystal Skull and that was in '57. I figure when he dies, it's going to be in the field.
  
  I loved his statement: "This was a lot easier when I was younger."
  
  You are quite welcome.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Wolfric 2010-06-21

  Good chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  Thank you, Wolfric.

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  (#) Cateagle 2010-06-22

  Heh, a good chapter that covers a fair chunk of time (too long, really, for much in the way of interior monologues from any character, but the chapter moved smartly and covered a lot of ground well). I see Harry's learning one of the drawbacks of very good, very intelligent help, things can happen quite quickly and often your needs can be appreciated before, or as soon as, you know them. I could see this occassionally getting a bit vexacious.
  
  Meanwhile, he had a lot of fun with his birthday party and it looks like he and Hermione will have some "interesting" books to study and practice from; perhaps they can eventually write their own 'sex magic' book.
  
  I do like the way he dealt with the Prophet and I suspect Albus is rather going to be taken aback when he finds he can't go after them and the new ownership doesn't really care what he says or threatens. That all of their employees are protected, too, will undoubtedly frustrate the old meddler even more.
  
  I reckon that Rahjit Patil was more than a bit surprised with what he encountered with Harry Potter, but I suspect it was a pleasant surprise (nice to know that some folk are even more than their legends make them out to be). So, he's apparently the "real" owner of Unversal Export? I can see where he might havea real bond with some of what Harry's trying to do, especially since Harry does have license from the Queen to terminally remove the Deez.
  
  I admit, I rather liked the idea of such a suitable bribe for the Sorting Hat, it sounds like an ingenious approach that's even more "hidden-handed" than anything Albus appears to have considered. I disremember what story I saw it in (I think it was one of Clell's), but I think re-using the idea of the Hat singing "Hey, Teacher, Leave Those Kids Alone" would be an interesting prank to play on "Uncle Albie" ("We're so sorry, Uncle Albie").
  
  As for that "Henry Jones", it might be Indy on his "last hurrah" or it could be Mutt in mid-career; but I could also see it as Mutt's offspring early in said offspring's career. In any case, there's clearly an expert there with Bill.
  
  I'll admit that I sniggered over Tom's continued headache problem. I wonder if he can be addicted to a narcotic pain reliever? If he decides to go after the Grangers again, it'll be interesting to see how much he loses this time (he drew back a 'bloody stump" last time, let's see if he's willing to risk more). The same goes for another attempt to "persuade" the goblins (methinks that, in his arrogance, he doesn't have a good read on their nature and personalities and is running into "cock the gun that is not loaded" situations).
  
  It sounds like Amelia and Augusta have the wizarding government more or less in hand and are workign to clean up those Augean Stables. I daresay finding out just what Albus had done to him had some fascinating "realignment" effects on Kingsley's attitude; Albus is slipping here. Between getting frozen out of the government and having Minerva slowly but steadily easing Hogwarts out from under is control, I suspect Albus is never going to see an "banana peels" in front of him until it's entirely too late. Speaking of his not seeing things until it's too late, I'm looking forward to seeing his reaction when Harry & his students don't show up, don't even register, for the Fall Term; losing control over that many is going to be a blow to his ego, but I wonder what the loss of that much tuition money is going to do to hogwarts budget? Methinks that's yet another way Harry can use to sideline the MOB.
  
  All in all, a fun chapter and I'm very definitely looking forward to the next one.

  Author's response

  Heya, Cat.
  
  I'm trying to keep it on four or five day bites when possible. Sometimes I'll focus on a shorter time period. and sometimes I'll skip a few weeks. the time line is so close just now, because he only has the summer to get everything ready. After Sept 1, it'll calm down...a little.
  
  ~I see Harry's learning one of the drawbacks of very good, very intelligent help, things can happen quite quickly and often your needs can be appreciated before, or as soon as, you know them. I could see this occasionally getting a bit vexatious.~
  
  It can be, but the benefits outweigh the cost.
  
  Since Harry never had a decent birthday, I figured he deserved one where he could do the things he loved. As for the book...Yeah, I can see them 'researching' for such a guide. Snicker!
  
  Prophet: Yeah. I needed them, and i had to wonder what was the best way to use them while putting a burr in Dumbledore's shorts at the same time.
  
  Rahjit: I had intended him to be a walk-on, but apparently I've developed the character enough to use him more than once. Yeah, he was surprised, but I intended it as more, his relief that his daughters would be well trained, rather than Harry's innate character. Delacour get's that.
  
  ~Universal Export. So, he's apparently the "real" owner of Universal Export?~
  
  I can neither confirm nor deny... Snarf! Sorry. I just hadda put that in. There will be no 'bonding'...so to speak.
  
  If I use him again, it will be as I said to Teresa, as a 'guest speaker' After all, a duelist with his astounding rate of fire would only be an asset to their training. If I use him, it won't be until after the new year.
  
  The story was Seel'Vor's 'Harry Potter, and the Quantum Leap' which I'm waiting fr him to finish. And I can't see any reason the hat shouldn't have an ulterior side. But what do you get a hat?
  
  I recall that fic as well, though the song I wrote is...somewhat different. "We're so sorry, Uncle Albie" just begs for proper lyrics! Snicker!
  
  Indy would be around a hundred, Mutt would be about fourty or fifty, and any of his offsprogs, would be in their late teens or early twenties. Me, I's expect it was Indy. I figure when he dies it's gonna be in the field. That's how I'd want to go.
  
  Tom's headaches are going to be a running joke throughout. He eliminated the connection between him and Harry at the Ministry, but there's just enough left to make his life miserable. It's also going to help keep the civilian casualties down by keeping him occupied, thereby preventing his planning too many raids.
  
  Addiction: Teresa's review prompted the same idea. Now if I can only make it work...
  
  Tom: Each time he sends his minions out, I'm going to make sure he looses a few, whether through Amelia, Harry, the goblins or the wards, he's gonna lose some. Maybe this will keep others from joining up?
  
  Naaaaahhh!
  
  For the time being, he's going to leave the goblins alone...until he's hungry enough.
  
  Amelia had a hard row ahead, but now she's got allies who won't back down.
  the pureblood domination is effectively over.
  
  The weak link is going to be Scrimgeour. I'll deal with him last.
  
  ~Between getting frozen out of the government and having Minerva slowly but steadily easing Hogwarts out from under is control, I suspect Albus is never going to see an "banana peels" in front of him until it's entirely too late.~
  
  Since he cannot see anyone smarter than he is, he's walking down the cobbled lane with his fingers in his ears and singing: "Tra la la la!"
  
  He's also going to get a nasty surprise from the Queen in a couple days.
  
  Harry&Co, not showing up: He's gonna have a heart attack.
  
  ~but I wonder what the loss of that much tuition money is going to do to Hogwarts budget? Methinks that's yet another way Harry can use to sideline the MOB.~
  
  I'd actually written that in already. Not only is he going to be missing twenty percent of his students, he's going to have to explain why a much larger percentage of the money they expected is no longer coming in.
  
  I do want to keep him at Hoggy's where Harry can keep an eye on him, until it's time for him to say good-bye.
  
  MOB! I love it!
  
  Alorkin
  
  Sorry, Mutt would be closer to sixty with corresponding ages for any kids.

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  (#) jabarber69 2010-06-22

  that was one hell of a chapter! extremely well written too!

  Author's response

  Thank yeeeewww! I had a lot of fun writing it.
  
  Alorkiin

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  (#) Cateagle 2010-06-24

  I liked the present Ginny gave him, and the information behind it. Methinks that Albus has managed, by his manipulations, to convert firm allies into equally firm, though more implacable, enemies. That may well end up being a prime piece of "snatching defeat from the jaws of victory", though I suspect there's enough building against him that it'd be more like "from the jaws of truce".
  
  It will be both interesting and amusing to see what new things the Twins develop after being exposed to what the Force can do; Minerva may shudder at the thought .
  
  y'know, Albus has left enough ticked-off folk in his wake that if they were to all gang together, he wouldn't stand a chance (and that's without Gellert joining that group, assuming he's still around in this universe.
  
  It's said that "pride goeth before a fall" and, considering that Dumbles' pride is already being carefully chipped away at, methinks his fall will be spectacular and rather entertaining.

  Author's response

  Heya Cat. Thanks again.
  
  I thought the present was rather poetic mesel'. More, it's entirely within Dumbledore's character.
  
  Ain't it interesting how a little information can do so much damage?
  
  I detest lies. A lie is the worst sort of betrayal, in my eye. My daughter will tell you that the thing I will invariably punish her for, is lying to me. I'll let her get away with a lot, but never that.
  
  Albus has lied to so many people for so long, he probably feels that whatever he says is automatically the truth. That's why he clings so desperately to his 'greater good'. He cannot imagine any other way to justify his crimes.
  
  ~It will be both interesting and amusing to see what new things the Twins develop after being exposed to what the Force can do; Minerva may shudder at the thought.~
  
  Quite honestly, so would I! Can you imagine the havoc they'd cause using the force? I'll address that particular character aspect on Mabon, in two chapters.
  
  Problem is, while those wronged, would instinctively follow Dumbledore's ideals of eternal redemption, Harry will not. If they get him he'll end up in prison until he finds or buys a way out. Harry's way is much nastier.
  
  Gellert is dead. He's a stiff! Bereft of life, he rests in peace! He's pushing up daisies, his metabolic processes are now history! He's off the twig!
  
  He's kicked the bucket, He's shuffled off this mortal coil, run down the curtain and joined the choir invisible!!
  
  He's an ex-dark lord...
  
  That said, I will not be using anything from either book sux, or book sux part deux. (unless I already have in which case, 'twas an accident.)
  
  Yeaop, Dumbledore is going to fall and he's going to fall hard. Following the old formula, he's going to lose everything he holds of value, one bit at a time, before the end. But Harry is not going to kill him. He promised.
  
  He's got something better in mind.
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) morcheller 2012-09-04

  Book Sux... I love it! It really did, almost as much as book sullen and the direlogue.

  Author's response

  Snicker!
  
  Yeah, she really dropped the ball on both.
  
  Alorkin

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