- This was an enjoyable story, despite feeling sketchy in places. Given the names and appearances of Luna's children, one can guess who the biological father is, my only question was if it was just the two of them or a three-for-all. All in all, combining the dark grey Harry and very light Harry seems to have produced a light-grey Harry who managed a productive life and arranged matters so that his friends were able to go on to productive lives while improving the government of wizarding Britain (well, at least it no longer looks as bad as, or worse than, a third-world kleptocracy). I had to chuckle at what happened to Ginny; if she was more domineering than her mother, she, IMHO, earned such a reward, much as Albus and Severus earned theirs.
I can't say that I feel sorry for Ron, but then nothing really bad happened to him, just nothing really good.
(#) twistyguru 2010-06-22Nicely done. I rather enjoyed some of the 'rush to the finish' feel--all too often in stories like this I feel that Harry sits and twiddles far too long, just to wait until his 7th year to off Voldie. I'm glad you didn't do that, but had Harry go right to work, using his foreknowledge of events and circumstances.
And, I didn't find it terribly cliche-ridden, either. :)
Yet another excellent effort from you, and I look forward to reading more of your works in the very near future.
- Epilogue (rereading all chapters)
Okay, I for one am still in the dark as to who put Harry's name into the Goblet of Fire. Was this Crouch Jr's work before his unmasking? Or Karkaroff? From his described reactions, I take it that it was not Dumbledore.
You might want to edit chapter 6 so Snape is told that Dumbledore has a deadline of the Winter Solstice. That way he's demonstrated to have failed.
Overall, Harry got a lot less ruthless as he went along; maybe Luna unearthed a Five-Winged Ruth to keep him company. Draco obviously never got his Rumple-Eared Feck in time.
I can see how Ginny would develop along the lines described (even to effectively marrying her fan club). With Harry pairing up with Hermione and thus taking much of the spotlight off of Ron, Ginny isn't so shadowed and thus comes into her own earlier. Pity it's after the Chamber year, so she's already Tomboy!Ginny; maybe that led to the need for the digitalis overdose.
That was a fun tale, if a bit rushed, but you did mention you're pressed for time, so it's understandable that we drop so seldom from narration into conversation. Thank you for making the effort to share it with us.
What's next? A Redo!Luna? Trelawney emerges from her sherry- and Confundus-induced haze to realize that she has just Seen the scope of canon future, and works to make amends for her part in Harry's nonstop abuse? Or a PolyJuice version of the Tournament year?
Author's responseQuote: Trelawney emerges from her sherry- and Confundus-induced haze to realize that she has just Seen the scope of canon future, and works to make amends for her part in Harry's nonstop abuse?
I don't think I could write that, but I think I'd like to read it! And snape entered Harry once he realized Harry had entered Draco
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