Jup, Frank had been in IHOP before. Frank had been that stuttering stupid young boy too, a while ago
(#) TakeThisToMyGrave 2010-10-18 03:10:51 PMThis got me thinking, it had a hint of cuteness, but the bitter truth of the real world.
I kinda want to go to IHOP now too, I don't even live where there is an IHOP! D:
But, wonderful update. Still really enjoying this story(:
Poor kid :/
Update soon xx
(#) broken_wings 2010-11-03 05:23:27 PMI'm really enjoying reading this...maybe "enjoy" is the wrong word. But I can't wait for more updates. Sometimes it gets a little wordy and confusing, the metaphors a teeny bit sloppy, but not enough to the point where I'm completely taken out of the story. Ficwad won't let me rate anymore, but if I could, I would give this another 5.
- I can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet! kicks self Well, let me start by saying that you've done it again; a story which grabs you by the throat and says "You think your life sucks? Check out this kid you ungrateful brat!!!"
What I love about rbtl is that Frank is not a particularly nice guy, even when he's doing something nice he's being all cynical about it, that's good, gives the character depth. Plus Frank not making a (really) big deal out of the shit that's happened to him makes me really respect this story; too many writers out there just turn a story into a pity parade, and that sucks. One of my favourite things about the way you write is how you have one sentance of actual story, and then a paragraph that follows on which gives this huge insight and background into why a character's just said/done what they just did. You seem to understand that a story isn't just 'what happens', but why it happens too; and that makes you a damn good author.
Last but not least; the occasional point of view of Gerard is really making all the difference, it's giving rbtl a whole extra dimension, allows the reader to step away from Frank and all the 'action' and gain another perspective on what's happening.
P.S. I'm dying for an update, hint hint ^-^