Chapter 10. oh no.
(#) bloodless_souls 2010-11-19 06:52:18 PMella's not dead is she???? i REALLY loved her character for some reason! :( and could you cut down on the POV's coz im forgetting them :/ i came across M and i couldnt remember who it was till it said i missed you mikey xD UPDATE SOON!!
Author's responseoh sorry!
just think of P!atd, MCR, Juliet, Ella and maybe Lauren.
the only double up is Ray so i put his full name and the other R is Ryan ^_^
i can never stick to one perspective haha. but i'll try!
(#) LittleMissFae 2010-11-19 09:58:21 PMI agree. Amazing except for all of the POVs. Possibly make each POV longer or limit the amount of different POVs in each. It seems like just as your getting comfortable with the character it changes. Just a tip, everything is great though. I loved the chapter
Author's responseIM SORRY IM SORRY IM SORRY IM SORRY!
I'll change my brain, I feel like everyone should know whats going on because i've been thinking about parts for ages!