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Hold your breath, kid!
5 ReviewsThey thought their childhood was destroyed, they thought they could never see each other again. But oh how wrong they were. FRERARD!!! and the struggles they encounter. FINISHED! plz R&R :)
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Hold your breath, kid!
(#) bloodless_souls 2011-01-25 06:41:04 PM
i just started reading this and i really like it, nice job update soon :D or is that the end?? D:Author's response
aww thank you soo much, i'm really glad you like it :)
and god no, there is way more drama and romance to come, it gets better cuz i wrote this ages ago.
:) so more to come :D -
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(#) X-x-Just-Sleep-x-X 2011-02-05 05:14:06 PM
I love this story so much.My favorite actually.I'm so glad that you'll be writing more.....listening to my chem right now. ;)Author's response
wow omg really? that just...wow xD
aww that really means a lot thank you >.<
xxx hehe cool :D
xx cfob -
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(#) comatosejoyx 2011-06-08 08:05:35 PM
Correct spelling, grammar and punctuation seems to be ignored by this author. In the first couple chapters you see the characters as children and assume the stinted sentence structure is a cute, clever trick to further portray that but it becomes evident in further chapters, when that style of mismatched writing continues, that the author just can't write maturely. I admit I could not make it to the end of the story because of the aforementioned reasons so cannot comment on the storyline but I'm definite the author has to pay more attention in English classes and drop the 'I made lots of mistakes, get over it' attitude.Author's response
okay well i take well to criticism but if you hated my story that much why make a horrible comment. I know the speeling and grammar ect isn't correct neither the best, but as i pointed out i had written this way back, nearly a year and a half ago. This is my first so there is bound to be mistakes as i pointed that i had never done a frerard let alone a proper story. Everyone has to start somewhere as practise makes perfect, yet no one can be perfect but at least i have tried.
I didnt want to state this but i also have autisam and ADHD, therefore i suffer from spelling, reading and writing difficulties, so i have tried my hardest for that not to stop me from doing something i love and am very passhionate about.
I read back on this and know that my writing is rubbish but it's a start and i know that i can achieve higher. In my recent work i believe i have grasped english a lot maturely and hope to excell more in english.
I aim to write more formally and correctly, but the least you could do was to be a lot more mature and nice about my work then you have. I take well to criticism like i said but only when it's said in a polite correct manner thank you. -
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(#) comatosejoyx 2011-06-09 08:53:35 AM
I am reviewing your work, not you. I wasn't rude to you personally or even your story, I gave my opinion on what I felt while I was reading, which is what reviews are about. I don't see how I was being immature about your work and yeah, I could've been nicer if your story warranted it. You obviously don't take criticism well and I don't see how I used an incorrect manner. I didn't say I hated the story, I'm just giving my opinion on things you can work on to make your next story better. If you're going to take things that personally and do not want honest opinions, good and bad, then you shouldn't put your stories out for people to judge and review. I'm not saying you should never write again or that you shouldn't enjoy writing.Author's response
yeah i know, it just felt like to me that you were taking a punch at me. You were say 'this author' instead of talking to me. Aswell as that i didn't actually like this story half way through XD i just kept on as people told me to, thats why i went with the whole 'if there is a mistake, deal with it' attitude, i didn't like this work. Though i have to say, this story is long gone and yeah i probs need to work on more of my grammar who doesn't. Just saying that if you look at my other stories you will see how i have improved.
Also on the computer you can never tell what way the person is taking it, if they are trying to be nice and helpfull or being mean y'know? thats why it's usefull to use emoticons and stuff so i knew you were trying to give me your opinion fairly and helping me :)
now i know your were giving your opp it's fine, maybe you should of checked my recent work though. Then you would of never even had to review this crap story XD lol
anyway all cool now :) -
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(#) dropthedaggerlaura 2011-07-23 07:12:19 PM
Oh wow honestly I really really love all your work. I don't wanna sound creepy but It's easily the best Frerard story I've read in ages... Took me away into their world, a rare feeling for me. I look forward to any new "Frerards" you may write.
Thanks!Author's response
awww you literally made me awww for real and now i have a masive grin on my face :D thats reallllly reallly nice to hear, thank youuu sooo much :)
seriously without comments like these i wouldn't be half as good :)
so thank youu soo much for your support it means the world, and i will also be looking forward to hearing more from you :)
and if you like my writing be sure to check out my other stuff :)
chazom
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LoL I DIDN'T EVEN CHECK WHICH STORY YOU MEANT THEN HAHA xD you serioulsy love this story :O i thought you meant happiness or misery? lol that one is worth reading more than this. THis is only my first and i think you will like my other ones better :) thank you for teh comment though i still really do love yyour support :p