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Contrary to belief, love doesn't conquer all, especially heedless ambition. Two lovers, before/during the fall. [Version 1.5]

Category: Cowboy Bebop - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Drama - Characters: Julia, Vicious - Warnings: [!!] - Published: 2006/05/14 - Updated: 2006/05/14 - 319 words - Complete

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  (#) sanguineus 2006-05-14 09:54:30 PM

  I liked it a lot, but the part where Julia goes into stream of consciousness kinda messes up the flow of the story--I mean, it's neat, almost clinical, but the SOC is a little sloppy. Like, I know that sounds weird to say, but if you shape so it more resembles thoughts, I think it would improve the overall tone of the fic.
  
  Because I do like it a lot, and even if it's mean to portray how wild and afraid she is under the surface--how unchecked her emotions are, I think you could give it a little structure.
  
  I love Vicious.

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