Like a ripple on a still pond, one action changed the progression of Harry's life. A simple action like raising his hand.
- Congratulations on having the nerve to come back to a story over two years after the last update.
I saw in your author's note that you got some discouraging reviews. I'm in the process of writing my first fanfic, and have been surprised at how much reviews affect me. People forget that there's a difference between someone writing for fun, or as a writing exercise, and and maybe just starting out, and someone trying to be a serious or professional writer.
My one piece of advice is to not be afraid to edit your old entries.
As to the story, having just read the whole thing through instead of waiting two years, you will be pleased to know that I didn't notice any sort of jarring break at all between the third and fourth chapters. You just picked up where you left off, which is impressive.
- What Circaea said.
It's been a while so i reread it and treated it as a new aquaintance. I stand by my previous (and rather bland) reviews.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. This magical world seems a bit more modern than most, and the eloquence is wonderful. While I'm of course curious about the storyline, i also look forward to the next installment just for the language.
I really enjoyed the unstated dinner. There's no need for a blow-by-blow, and this way, this dinner is a resource for the plotholes that keep opening in the best of stories. They talked about it at dinner. So There!
Flames suck. I've had a few, and it doesn't really help to tell yourself that they don't matter 'cause they do. And not. They are a part of why my Muse took off with a strange bloke in a blue box. One day i will follow your example and finish my story.
I'll be here for the rest.
- Is that a dragon I see, riding the air-currents, getting ready to open its mouth and burn Dumbles' credibility to a crisp? (His PUBLIC credibility/reputation, that is; his credibility/reputation with Harry and most of the Wizengamot is already roasted.) Percy stops by #12 (with his Penelope); and earlier, Hermione apologizes (to Harry) and gets gently called on the carpet about Wizarding Tradition (also by Harry). And we should also have the answer to the Sixty-Four-Galleon Question as to what that voice in Harry's Head is coming from - his House Potter Ring. (The Voice itself gave the jig up by saying that it has been advising Potters since the 1100s. That is eight centuries, folks; given how long some families in Magical Britain keep other things, what would be MOST likely, other than weapons, to withstand the test of time and be held by magical nobility?) Also, Rings of Nobility (the heraldric term - it's not magical OR muggle) can also be used to affix seals to documents; yes, it's more tradition. That use is straight out of known history (specifically, European history), as this was the case for nobility throughout Europe.
- This has become a story i return to at least weekly. It's just so.. I dont know, mature. The language, the setting, everything. I only wish it was longer.=)
Ordinarily, the feudal-style wizarding world seems locked in the 1650's. This one is more late 1700's with some 1900´s influences. I verily like. Have a box of [sunshine] and do continue.