(#) sargentaaron2004 2011-03-28Very good chapter!
Adding Star Trek items into the fray? The Vulcan Lythette. Your sci-fi knowledge is impressive.
I hope Nagini keeps her word with Harry... I like the idea of turning Nargini against Voldamort.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
Author's responseHeya Sarge!
Star trek: Just that one. I was writing the wedding scene and suddenly Luna appeared with Fawkes riding on her shoulder, playing the Lytherette. Since I'd built one as a teen, I knew it could be done, so I did.
Knowledge: I'm nearly fifty and have been involved in Science Fiction since was ten.
Nagini: She's a product of her environment, so I decided to give her an out. This decision was actually made sometime last year, although at the time, I had intended having Harry convince her to convince Voldy that Harry would be in a place he could be captured. After some thought, I decided the logistics of that were far and above what I wanted so I slimmed it down.
Thanks for the review.
- You clearly stated that some of the surviving Death Eaters managed to flee. What is the point in obliviating the Ministry employees? The stated reason is bogus, since Voldemort can hear of the Jedi from the surviving bad guys.
The only reason I can see for doing that is to keep it out of the press.
Author's responseHello, slickrcbd.
Yes. The ministry obliviation is to protect the employees from being tortured for information they no longer had. They can't spill what they don't know.
The escaped Deez have returned in failure. Voldemort is not well-accepting of failure. They knew he wouldn't give them much chance to explain about the clearly magical swords they saw, before he threw a tantrum. Voldemort already knows Harry has one, as that was reported to him after the Wizengamot session in July.
As for the press, Rita and Euwings both know about the lightsabers, but since nobody has ever explained what they were, or how they worked, they're still 'magical blades'.
Trust me. There is method to my madness.
- Thank You! Thank You! Thank You! I felt like a kid on Christmas when I seen that you added the new chapter. As always the chapter is written beautifully, and the story is flowing exceptionally.
The only question I have is: Should the invitation have read LORD HARRISON JAMES POTTER, LORD BLACK, LORD GRYFFINDOR since he is Lord of the Black house as well?
May your muse stay by your side thru everything you write.
Author's responseHello, No-one.
You are quite welcome. I'm so happy to see you like your present.
Invitation: Actually, no. When someone holds two or more, titles, the one with supremacy is generally used. For instance, Harry's proper title in this story, is Harrison James Potter, Lord Potter, Black, Gryffindor. Duke of Anglesy, Duke of Lincolnshire, Duke of Orkney and the Hebrides.
A bit wordy, that. Since Gryffindor is the highest-ranked title, he'd be referred to, as Lord Gryffindor.
Muse: She's playing games, just now, but I think she'll stick around.
- Some more students have passed to the Padawan level with the construction of their own lightsabers.
Looks like Ron will go the way of Rosh Penin with the way Luna is acting. Fall and then get his arm chopped off to teach him humility.
Beltane? I've heard that, but I have no idea when or what it is other than what you have posted.
Minarud is having fun.....at Rita's expanse. Seems like someone is chasing Minaurd and he's avoiding weddings because of it.
Harry still knows how to keep Rita in line..
Now Cissy gets a taste of Voldie's maddness with cruicio.
I wonder how much angrier Harry can make Dumbles. ^_^
Snape knew what to to survive with the bottle switching.
“Arrogant bastard! Just like his father!”
Snape's standard insane rant against Harry. Harry needs to give Snape some more pain and headaches.
Dangerous ground their Harry teasing Minerva like that.
The Dursleys? Dudley is really improving. Petunia seems to be at least somewhat redeemable.
Nice threat there Jedi.
Is granite really that dense? I think of Osmium and depleted Uranium.
I wonder if Ollivander will move into the Jedi enclave. The guy is aincent and knows quite a bit. The druid priestess was able to identify Ollivander right off. The druids must have a lot of respect for the old wand maker.
An odd insturment for an odd girl. Fitting though. Not as odd as the laser insturments at COSI. Break the beam and you get a har sound or a drum sound.
Helen seems to be stabalizing.
Interseting ceremony. No real comments on that.
The Force ghosts caught everyone off guard. I wonder what Ollivander will think of Yoda showing up like that.
Petunia is not completly lost. She was tormented by Snape when they were both children.(I know the horrid books, but still it give a reason) She does care for Dudley. That might be the wedge that breaks Dumble's compulsions.
Dangeous situation there you woke up to Dudley. ^_^ At least Dudley will soon learn what his cousing has been doing. Those two should be brothers, since they grew up together. At least Dudley is free of Dumble's control and is turning himself around.
There goes Dumbles on a rant of Harry not being a good little puppet. And now Voldie is helping Dumbles out to get rid of Amelia.
Now the Jedi hit their first full on mission. Poor Eric Munch. Still he gave Amelia time for the Jedi to arrive.
Amelia is trusting Tommy-boy to torture the failed Death Eaters and not question the survivors a bit too much, but okay. Or maybe counting on that the Deez won't say anything to portray them in a worse light.
15 dead, 7 wounded POWs, 8 fled(1 of them was killed, so 16 dead)
The dangerous balancing act of a guriella war(Barty Crouch's exteme methods being one side)
PTSD/PTSS might be the reason Revan, Malak, Anakin, and so many others fell to the dark side. I hope Susan feels better later.
Sanpe deserves a lot more pain.
I think the ladies will be voting Dumbles out of office and they can use what happened to Helen as the excuse, although it is really to secure the ministry against the threat of Dumbledore. Amelia now knows the biggest hole in the defenses and needs to close it.
Nagini. At least the snake is thinking things over and has decided that Harry might have the better alternatives. Heck with the ways soos are now, nagini will be in a comfortable place and not worry about food and just have people gape at her. If Harry survivies, I can see that he might be a regular visitor to the London Zoo to check up on nagini. I wonder if Nagini will lay eggs there.
Author's responseHeya Disruptor!
Although I'm not using the term 'Padawan', They all have. I can see the advancement from Soresu to Ataru to be a clear step toward Knighthood, and so, if it were me, I'd pick that point to entrust them with real weapons.
Hey, wait...it is me! (Grins.)
Ron future has already been written and that's all I'm going to say about that.
Beltane is one of eight celebrations in the Druidic (and pagan) faiths. Each is about six weeks from the last. Beginning at the Winter Solstice onj Dec 21/22, you have Imbole, on Feb 1-2, the Vernal equinox at around Mar 21, Beltane which is May first, the Summer solstice on June 21/22, Lughnasadh on August 1, and Samhain (hallowe'en)on Oct 31-Nov 2.
Beltane is a celebration of life and usually symbolizes the end of winter and the beginnings of spring.
Minuard 1: Not really. He's doing a difficult and wearing job, and like most military, he takes his entertainment where he can find it.
Minuard 2: Possible, but I hadn't considered it. When I was with the MC a lot of guys were getting married. We made up that joke, but oddly enough it turned out to be pretty accurate.
Rita: What better way than the threat of vivisection to keep someone in line?
Cissy: What can I say. Voldemort is an equal opportunity psychopath.
Dumbley: Actually, I'm hoping to see him pop a vein.
Minerva: What? It was a perfectly accurate statement. (Snickers)
Dudley and Petunia: See below.
Snape 1: First and foremost, Snape is out to protect himself. He may believe in the blood purist rhetoric, but his only real loyalty is to himself.
Snape 2: Quite honestly, in Canon, Snape and Petunia deserve each other. Both hate Harry for his parents, and neither one can let go a grudge that should have died years before.
Threat: See vivisection.
Of the natural minerals Granite is one of the most dense. Osmium is very rare and rather expensive, and uranium, depleted or not is both rare and radioactive.
When one sees Granite, the first thought is usually "Rock! Hard!"
Ollivander: He's already living there, since the second of October.
It's more the Druidess has a profound respect for the Calaquendi, and Ollivander represents them. Both the Pagan and Druidic traditions are very much in tune with the earth and as such, they would naturally revere the high elves.
Odd Instrument: Well, yes, but I can see her playing it. It's just odd enough it would attract her attention.
Helen: Fortunately, Helen was reached immediately...before the trauma begin eating at her. with the comfort and protection of the Jedi, the families and her parents, not to mention Lorelei, she has a better than even chance to recover without any lingering effects.
Ceremony: As I said, I took it from the net and modified it a bit to incorporate the magical aspects.
~The Force ghosts caught everyone off guard. I wonder what Ollivander will think of Yoda showing up like that.~
"Shit, Gollum! You got fat!"
Seriously though, I'd imagine Ollivander is wise enough to accept the force ghosts. He explained to Harry back in October that he was well aware of the Star Wars movies.
Petunia: While she has shown some regrets, she was an adult and as an adult, she should have taken care of her sister's son like a normal human being would. Instead, she heaped her jealousy and hatred for her dead sister on the shoulders of a child and IMO, there's no excuse for that. While she might show some tears, she still has to atone for her actions. (I have a lot of issues from my own childhood and when I saw the first movie, her attitude really brought it back. (See PTSD, below))
Dudley: He's OK. They both woke up understanding they'd done nothing to be ashamed of.
And you're right. In fact, his change of attitude is a major thread in his story. Once the filling was gone, his reversal, was on his own, and it was because he understood that what he'd been doing was plain wrong, and wanted to correct it.
Neither Petunia nor Vernon has accepted that yet.
Oh by the way, the compulsions have been removed. I'll detail that in the second to last chapter.
Dumbledore and Voldemort both believe thy are the smartest thing since Newton, that nobody can possibly be as smart as they are and ergo cannot figure out their wonderful plans.
See rule number 12 in 'The Rules For Evil Overlords'. Always have a five year old on staff. If that kid can find a hole in your plan, scrap it.
Eric: I really didn't like killing him off, but he was basically written as a disposable character. If nothing else, he died saving someone's life. I can't imagine a better way of dying. If he had a family (and I'm not certain I'm going to give him one) I'd imagine they'd be proud he was willing to sacrifice himself for the real 'greater good'.
Amelia: Not really. She knows her enemy. Voldemort is not known for having a sense of humour. Through the war-years, she's learned enough to know that Tommy doesn't take failure well. Harry has given her enough information that she knows Voldy will torture first, torture second, torture some more and then ask questions if there's anybody left alive.
~15 dead, 7 wounded POWs, 8 fled(1 of them was killed, so 16 dead)~
I'd say they done good!
"Balancing: And yet, it can be done...as long as there are people willing to take the responsibility for their actions. Barty gave Carte Blanch, Amelia has given increased authority but also the requirement to act properly while using that authority.
It's like this. When I was a police officer, I had the authority to shoot people...but I had to ensure everybody and their cat understood it was absolutely necessary.
Susan: Like every warrior, she will either face her terrors or fall to them. She has an advantage, actually. Having grown up with the head of the DMLE, she is more than used to the mindset of a soldier. that can only help. That she's got her extended 'family' (and her lovers) around her will also help.
I also have PTSD, though mine is manageable. Oddly enough, it was the abuse I lived through as a child that made it not so bad. Weird, huh?
Snape 3: He's got mucho pain coming in the very near future. In fat, for the rest of his miserable existence he'll be wishing he was with the Dark lord again.
The Ladies: It's a done deal. They suspect his was involved with the attempt to murder Amelia, but he's damn good. They' can't prove anything. However, in terms of his positions, he's actually cut his own throat. He's neglected his responsibilities for far too long and with his removal from the school, his other positions are gone forevermore. His strike at Amelia was a last ditch, and rather desperate attempt to recover his authority. Since Augusta is the only one left who can make such a portkey, it q would be simple to regulate that ability.
Dumbledore had everything but because he got careless, Harry has taken away /everything/, he had, one item, one glory, one bit of influence at a time.
I took the idea From John Steinbeck's short story 'Flight', which struck a deep chord in me many years ago.
Nagini: Nagini is an interesting character. No viper that I'm aware of is that large, so it's clear to me that she's been tampered with. As such, she is most likely sterile, and if not corrupted, at least unique. It's a shame she'll die alone in a zoo, but like Harry said, she was never meant to be there. All she could look forward to on her own, would be death.
Thanks for the loverly review.
(#) Wonderbee31 2011-03-30Well done chapter here, really enjoyed it as a whole, with special moments all around, including: That scene with Nagini, it was great to see her and Harry ale to have a chat, as well as show that as a magical creature, she's not all crazy kilL! like Tom is, though it makes me almost feel sorry for Tom in a way, and wonder if he'd have had a better chance if Dumbledore had been more than a halfway decent person? I loved the wedding, especially Luna and her mad skillz, though you know, if you ever do a full cross, it'd be great to see Trek brought into the fray. I've been watching Trek since near the end of the original run, so let's have a Trek-off one day LOL.
Good to see Rita brought to heel but good, and got to say that Dumbledore keeps getting free moments, but can see the noose slowly gripping 'round his neck. Glad to see Amelia survive this, and got to wonder, in some Harry goes back in time fics, wouldn't it be interesting to see him and the fiery red-headed 'Puff named Amy Bones hook up LOL. i've got to keep that on the back burner or give it up for adoption. Have a good one.
Author's responseHeya Wonderbee!
Thank yeeeewww! Though it was difficult to wrestle into readable form, I enjoyed writing it.
Nagini: I suppose JKR doesn't like snakes. All of the bad guys in her 'verse are snaky. (Wonder what the bad guy would have been like had she disliked Owls?) In this case, I can see Nagini as a magically mutated status symbol that Tom created for himself. As a creature with a functioning brain, I can see her as wondering if she was gonna get out of this with her skin attached...and why.
Tom: We are of a mind here. While I cannot have much sympathy for him, I wonder how much influence Dumbledore had, and how much Dumbledore influenced him. For inductance, given that the magical community was so small, how was it Riddle was never discovered by the ministry? According to the pile of pages released in '06, Dumbledore's father went to prison for attacking some muggles who should have been beaten soundly by everybody they knew for beating up a child. If they intervened then, why didn't they do so many years latter when a magical child was placed in a muggle orphanage?
My conclusion...Dumbledore kept it from happening. By '26 he'd already seen the direction Grindelwald was taking, and so, needing weapon to help fight him, or to distract him, he arranged for Merope to drug Tom, Jr. Potions and Alchemy are not that far removed.
(Don'tcha just love plot-holes?)
The wedding was one of several I fund on the web, so I can't take credit for that. I just tightened it up some, and included magic into the mix.
The Lytherette just happened. I don't know why. I was wondering what kind of music I should include. Should I have a choir of students and singing toads...Naaaah, that was stupid! Anyway, I was wondering if I should have someone playing an instrument and as I make guitars as a hobby, that idea popped to mind. But it was too normal. That's when Luna just danced onto my desk playing the Vulcan Lytherette and said: "This will work!"
Are you certain you want to do a Trek-off?
I started watching Star Trek back in '67, and I read the very first Trek-novel, 'Spock must Die, by James Blish, when it came out in 1970, Since then I've read probably three hundred of them. I have built several dozen models including a flying Enterprise and have built a working tri-corder.
By the way: Who were the Jeffries tubes named after and what was his contribution to both the show and to our society as a whole?
Rita has been forced to understand that she's in as solid a prison as any made of stone and steel. Harry will let her go...eventually, but for the time being, she will behave!
Amelia: I couldn't let Amelia die. Her's was one of the most useless deaths in the series. Unfortunately, Rowling never went into the effects her murder would have on Susan.
The only one who can't see that rope is Dumbledore himself.
Permit me an evil chuckle here, please.
That is an outstanding idear! Please, do not put it up for adoption!
Here is a challenge. Write that. You are one of my more in-depth reviewers, so you obviously have the skills. Let's see if you can turn a wonderful idea into a readable story.
Hoping to read more...
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