My opening chapter
(#) StopThePress 2011-04-25 06:02:59 PMI love the way this starts, by the way! I really like where this story's going. The only thing I would advise you to do is practice separating quotes with the enter key. Every time a character speaks, unless the same character is still speaking, hit the 'Enter' key. (: Other than that, I really like this story!
Author's responseThank you, I will remember to do that on my next chapter. I haven't written Fanfics in a long time I love reading them but I have to have a good idea if I am going to write one.