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Mistakes
0 Reviewssome mistakes you may find in the Break Me series.
ok so some mistakes or bad things you may find while reading my fanfic:
1) I constently say Kurono is 8000 years old. this is an exageration... shes actully only about 2300 years old. idk y i started saying 8000 and ive tried to go back and fix some of those places but i cant say i'll fix them all
2) Misspellings. im just that bad. and my grammer aswell
3) I try too hard to fit the actual storyline of the show/manga and i tend to mess-up stuff like how many days passed. (I.E. saying it took two days for the captains to aid Ichigo when really it took 1 day, stuff like that)
4) Out of Character. this tends to happen mainly with Kurono and a little bit with Grimmjow. (By the way im trying to come up with a reason Kurono has started acting like Bella Swan{Ugh.. cant stand her and yet my character turns into her!} It mainly has to do with what happens with her sister and the confusion and the over all the stress shes been under)
5) Sudden change in mood. i dont know if thats a bad thing but it annoys me. this is mainly due to the fact i listen to music while writing. when the music changes i often change mood. i tend to repeat the song just to keep the mood. (You may not notice this problem but as the writer i notice it very well)
6) SUDDEN CHESSY SCENES AND DRAMA!! Im sorry for the overly chessy parts. (I.E. Kurono running to kiss Grimmjow in the rain, i mean come on thats stupid.)I hate anime's with too much drama (I.E. Vampire Knight) and yet i find them wiggling thier way into my stories. rereading my story i find parts that could smother someone with thier drama- and im sorry
7) song lyrics finding thier way into the scene. i am really sorry for this one- i often dont even know until i go back and reread it. (I.E. Chapter 19 in "To Purify My Soul")
9) ITS TOO LONG!! Im sorry but i have alot that goes on in this story. im not one for writing small short stories. oh and thier are 4 parts to this tale each having their own sets of chapters. but there just might be a sequel about after Aizen is defeated... idk yet
10) The fighting parts and describing things. im bad at it for some reason... i dont find the room ppl are sitting in as important. I just type what comes to mind and the describion of the room is not one of them. i dont find walls interesting...
another thing about describing: Ryu, i have never told you what he looks like! i just noticed this and i cant beileve it! to tell you the truth dont really know what he looks like... odd aint it?
That is 10 bad things that you will find in my story. if you can get past it then youre good!
Have Questions about this fanfiction?? just leave a review asking!
1) I constently say Kurono is 8000 years old. this is an exageration... shes actully only about 2300 years old. idk y i started saying 8000 and ive tried to go back and fix some of those places but i cant say i'll fix them all
2) Misspellings. im just that bad. and my grammer aswell
3) I try too hard to fit the actual storyline of the show/manga and i tend to mess-up stuff like how many days passed. (I.E. saying it took two days for the captains to aid Ichigo when really it took 1 day, stuff like that)
4) Out of Character. this tends to happen mainly with Kurono and a little bit with Grimmjow. (By the way im trying to come up with a reason Kurono has started acting like Bella Swan{Ugh.. cant stand her and yet my character turns into her!} It mainly has to do with what happens with her sister and the confusion and the over all the stress shes been under)
5) Sudden change in mood. i dont know if thats a bad thing but it annoys me. this is mainly due to the fact i listen to music while writing. when the music changes i often change mood. i tend to repeat the song just to keep the mood. (You may not notice this problem but as the writer i notice it very well)
6) SUDDEN CHESSY SCENES AND DRAMA!! Im sorry for the overly chessy parts. (I.E. Kurono running to kiss Grimmjow in the rain, i mean come on thats stupid.)I hate anime's with too much drama (I.E. Vampire Knight) and yet i find them wiggling thier way into my stories. rereading my story i find parts that could smother someone with thier drama- and im sorry
7) song lyrics finding thier way into the scene. i am really sorry for this one- i often dont even know until i go back and reread it. (I.E. Chapter 19 in "To Purify My Soul")
9) ITS TOO LONG!! Im sorry but i have alot that goes on in this story. im not one for writing small short stories. oh and thier are 4 parts to this tale each having their own sets of chapters. but there just might be a sequel about after Aizen is defeated... idk yet
10) The fighting parts and describing things. im bad at it for some reason... i dont find the room ppl are sitting in as important. I just type what comes to mind and the describion of the room is not one of them. i dont find walls interesting...
another thing about describing: Ryu, i have never told you what he looks like! i just noticed this and i cant beileve it! to tell you the truth dont really know what he looks like... odd aint it?
That is 10 bad things that you will find in my story. if you can get past it then youre good!
Have Questions about this fanfiction?? just leave a review asking!
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