When Hermione agrees to House Seat for Harry whilst he goes for his first holiday, neither of them realized how this well change Hermione’s life forever. Full Summary within!
- I've got some idea of where the house elf door is going but i'll wait (hopefully not too long) and see. There were a few spelling mistakes but nothing too horrendous. Some of it felt just a little too cliche with dumping an awful lot of normal cliche pieces in a single paragraph or two. Now it doesn't mean i think this going to be cliche as theres normally the problem of how to introduce the entire premise in one chapter and not having it come out awful and you did far better than most I've read.
As to the punishments I'm in two minds, on one hand it might just be things house elves don't like eg not being able to do the washing which could maybe be worked in and having hermione just getting bored and agitated. Or punishment a la dobby and have hands being ironed. I wouldn't like that but what I'm trying to say is don't shy away from some serious punishment as from canon its normally quite harsh (although dobby may be an exception) so maybe have candle wax / flame punishments or just solitary/restrained/desensitised ie tied up alone in a small space with earmuffs blindfold mittens etc if you want to push the kink have her unable to use a proper bathroom or something equally depraved ;)
hope that helped and hope to see an update soon (also fav'd)
Author's responseGot the next chapter done already, and deepending on reviews on the next chapter, as I said in the A/N, it'll be a slow update story. Like the punishment ideas... but need to wonder when they can be used.
(#) Darkmark66 2011-08-08 09:24:58 AMA very good start and great insight I am glad Harry has changed because of all he has experenced and now knows. It's a pity something can't be done to punish Albus and the others maybe the Goblins could get back what was stolen if nothing else.
I am very pleased Molly is dead I never liked her and how she treated Harry, Sirius and Fleur most of all. I agree with you about Remus the man was never there for Harry and it was foolish for Tonks to risk her life when her son needed her.
Ron never was a good friend without Hermione I hope Ron suffers or people find out he left during the hunt as Ron never really faces any punishment for his actions as he is always forgiven.
Its no surprise Albus and Molly used Harry for their own ends. Harry should find out who his sisters are so he won't marry them by mistake but other than making sure they are happy he should not acknowledge them as the Potter name would be a great burden for them when they could be Happy without it.
A good insight into the magical population they turned on Harry quickly and often then expect him to fight and die for them.
A House Punishment they seem to know a great deal so maybe an elf could be punished by not being allowed to learn or work for a while also they could be sent away to another property for a while elves would like a family to work for if they have to work on their own for a while that would be hard for them.
Not saying an elf's name could also be used when Cedrics dad called Winky Elf she seemed very afraid the loss of identity could make a good punishment.
Harry could also demand an elf not use magic to do their work for a while as he would know how hard cleaning is without magic.