Gerard's confused, and more questions are asked.
- You certainly are an expert at building the suspense. The short sentences are well built and powerful. Gerard's frustration is actually felt by the reader, thus making you want to read the next chapter. The choice sentences that trail off are well done, just adding to the mystery of it all. Some of the questions Gerard asks himself get a little repatitive, probably to emphasize the importance? That's all I have to say on this chapter. Well done.
Author's responseWell thank you very much. :)
(#) AmberMayJensen 2011-08-11 02:05:26 AMI am very intrigued by this story. It's well written, flawless and powerful. It's one of my favorites, and all the questions have me sitting on the edge of my seat.
Author's responseOh wow, well thank you! I'm glad you think so. I'll be updating soon. xo
- Waaaaaah! I'm soooo curious! And i'm trying really hard to find out what he did but my mind just won't tell me. Dammit! xD
Anyway, this was an awesome chapter, i know i say that at every chapter but it's true X)
Author's responseHahaha, it's not as bad as you might think. Everyone just hates him for it because he ruined lives. Think.. think smaller.