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one: vestigial sins

The keys to a happy life, but the priests are not.

Category: Romance - Rating: R - Genres: Angst, Humor, Romance - Characters:  - Published: 2006/06/04 - Updated: 2006/06/05 - 5020 words

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• Flowers in the Dark

  (#) Pixie Dreamer 2006-07-23 09:37:39 PM

  Ok so i fianlly got through both chapters as per your request and this is what i have to say. As usual i love your writing style Merche, the way you word things and use different words that i wouldn't have ever thought to use. i don't get why Princess Lulu wants to be called that or why she likes things colorless but i figure its early in the story and there'll be more on that later. Kira confuses me or more rightly his occupation does. Is this kid a preist? he seems way to young and i believe you said in chapter zero that Lulu was about our age and he was only a year or two older then her which means he'd be too young to be a priest unless he did some "become a minister online" thing. I believe the religon you mentioned him as belonging to was Catholic which is also my religion and i'm pretty sure you have to be in the seminary for a real long time before they let you become a priest. i don't think i've ever seen or heard of a priest under like 35 tops. I like your description of Min and the scene where Kira stumbles around Lulu's apartment drunk. Lulu seems really blank, and i know that's kind of how she's supposed to be but she should still have some emotions somewhere that we should hear about besides boredom and annoyance. Overall you have thoroughly peaked my intrest and i'm waiting for the next part. Let me know when it's up.
  Ashlee

  Author's response

  I haven't gotten around to this part yet, but there's a reason Kira is a priest when he's only 20-something, and it's very very funny.

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