- well, much as i'd love to flame you for the intro paragraph you gave, i can't, because there's nothing much to flame really. except it's hard to tell whose speaking at times. and the transition between jokingly/playful to romantic/serious is a little fast.
asides from that, it was pretty good. keep writing!
(#) Life-is-Pain 2006-06-09Thank you for the reviews, and I shall try to write more, though at the moment exams are driving me mad. An extra bit of thanks to Frimmy, I see those faults now, and will try to fix it in any other writing I do. As for heather, if you register, you can post your story on this site.
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