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Watched
4 ReviewsHaley finds out she's being watched but why? And more importantly by who? Rated PG-13 for violence in later chapters.
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Watched
(#) Vampirechick1159 2011-09-18 03:51:34 PM
I'maliking it. BUTTTTTTTTTT I can see some places you could have worded it a little differently...not to mention some grammar issues...I should shut up before my criticism becomes less than critical. >.< Post more! :D -
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(#) AbandonedHope 2011-11-20 06:00:11 AM
I'm curious as to where this is going to go... Will there be more past this one chapter?
It was a good beginning. I was drawn in... But now I find myself wanting more. I certainly hope this isn't all you're planning on posting. O.o
Mmm, I'm not seeing too much to be critical about honestly. I enjoyed it, especially for a first chapter... Those can be difficult. I guess just with how cool she is with the guys in her room and maybe more descriptions with that instead of just 'pop'... although I guess maybe that's what you were aiming for.
I'll shut up now. It was excellent! -
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(#) XxPerfectTomorrowxX 2011-11-20 06:01:29 AM
Lovely. I'd like more.
Will there be more?
It could go anywhere so I'm interested in where you're going to take it. Explanations are always good. (: -
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(#) vampiredude1159 2011-11-23 11:56:04 AM
Trust me, I will write more.I'm just kinda of been on a writing hiatus for a while but I'm getting back into it now. So expect a chapter soon!