"He would have willingly left the cruel world that had snatched away his optimism and innocence." Please read and review.
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-12 12:05:57 PMI saw this and i had to read it because I saw that you had written it. Gerard being big brother for a Mikey that has no one else to talk to and is emotionally troubled is among one of my favorites in My Chemical Romance fanfiction. The other is Frikey where Mikey didn't make it into Pencey Prep and Frank made it into My Chemical Romance. That was actually the kind of Frikey I tried to write, but the beginning was bad, so I didn't finish it. I'll stop now because this comment isn't about me. It's about you and your wonderful writing. I'll continue now. Long oneshots are really great to read because that means someone has really thought out ther story instead of just putting up anything,
and I wouldn't care if it was long, just if it was well
written. This is very well written. It almost kinda
scares me how well this is written and how well you
write in general. I like how Gerard acts like he doesn't know what happened because he's hoping to get Mikey to open up to him. I also like how I feel like I can hear Mikey's sobs and I can see Gerard rubbing Mikey's back. When I read your writing it feels like I'm there in the story and this is happening right before my eyes. Your writing provokes extremely strong imagery and emotion. I don't think I could ever dislike a thing about your stories and I don't think that I could dislike any of your stories at all. Sorry about any mistakes in any comments I've posted. I can type, really, but I do everything on my iPod and my thumbs are kinda big and it replaces things I don't want to be replaced and it's just terrible to write a comment on one of these things. The commas and aposthrophes are my fault. I only know about nouns and things, not where apostophes belong.
Author's responseWow, it's really touching that you would read something because I wrote it - that's made me smile! The whole Gerard brother to Mikey thing is my favourite style of fanfic (other than high school Frikey), so I hope that I did that aspect of things justice. I know what you mean about typing on iPod, I'm typing this response on one! Thank you very much for reviewing - reviews always brighten my day! :)
(#) KobraBlaze 2011-11-22 03:49:17 PMWow. This story was amazing and the fact that it was just a one-shot really shows your writing ability to create such a scene and a story with your words. I love reading your stories. They are excellent. I love Gerard's brotherly affection towards Mikey and how Mikey is so stressed over his parents, friends and trust. I don't know how you do it but every single one of your stories are unbelievable and I find no fault or misunderstanding in them. So really well done!
Author's responseThank you very much - I'm glad that you like what I write! Thanks for such a sweet, lovely review - you've made me smile! :)