"I just hope that he has the courage left within his battered soul to let me in." Read, review, rate and feel my love :P
(#) tortillachip 2011-11-21 03:31:06 PMThere's not a thing about this that doesn't make me wanna jump for joy and dance around the room. Your writing abilities have got me on lock, and there is not a thing that you can do or write to make me dislike your writing. Maybe your headache is affecting your ability to think because this is an absolutely, terrifically, wonderfully great chapter, and someone that thinks otherwise is out of their mind. Just kidding about the headache thing, but I hope you get better. Headaches are the worst. I used to suffer from terrible migraines, so I feel your pain. I don't really get them now though, which I am
thankful for. Anyway, this chapter, as stated before, is great. I like how you show that Frank really cares about Mikey, even if he's never met him before, with that part about Frank carrying. You said in the second chapter "He barely has time to look away from his prey before I am pinning him to the alley wall with a strength I never knew I possessed." It
goes to show that one only needs strength when their fighting for something important to them. Luckily in Frank's case he had enough strength left over so he could carry Mikey in the third chapter. I've been wanting to say this for a while, but I just didn't. I really like your metaphors and similes. I don't go searching for these in every story I read, but I couldn't help but notice that yours are so strong and vivid. I also really like that ending. It was such a clever way to end it and it was cleverly written. Well written, well done, and I hope you get well.
Author's responseThank you very much! I think I've managed to sleep off the headache for now. I'm very glad that you like it, I really wasn't a huge fan of that chapter, but I'm very pleased that you liked it! I've tried to write Frank as kind of like a good-Samaritan style character; always willing to help those who need it, the sort of person to trust until the trust has been misused kinda thing. Thank you very much for reviewing, it always make me smile! :)
(#) KobraBlaze 2011-11-22 08:36:12 AMWow. Your writing is amazing. Tortillachip has kinda summed up what I want to say. It's is really really really brilliant. When I see you've posted a new story I always read them cause the are always fantastic. Much like this story. I can't wait for more and I hope your headache gets better. Im currently sick from school with one so I know what it's like. Update soon please! :)
Author's responseThsnk you very much, I'm soooo glad that you liked it! I hope that your headache gets better soon - I managed to sleep mine off. I'll try to update asap but I can't promise anything as I'm currently replying to this one-handed; my right hand is in a sling due to an "extreme air guitar accident" and I'm going for an xray in the morning. Anyway; thanks for reviewing, it's made me feel better already! :)
(#) KobraBlaze 2011-11-22 02:19:33 PMWhoa... That sounds interesting. I hope it's not too bad. And take your time updating!
Author's responseDon't worry, I've taken some painkillers so it isn't hurting too much at the moment. It was kinda funny actually, especially when my doctor had to write "extreme air guitar accident" on the form for the xray guys tomorrow. I'm well into the fourth chapter (I'm left handed and my right hand is the injured one) so it might be posted later tonight, or at some point tomorrow at latest. Thanks for caring! :)
(#) SyraStrange 2011-11-26 03:44:31 AMIf this is bad to you... I'm amazed with you. How in hell is this the worst one you've written?!? -shakes head- You. Are. An. Incredible. Writer.
Author's responseThank you sooooo much! I guess I kinda felt that it was too long or not interesting enough; but your lovely review has made like it more! Thank you very much! :)