Iris Jensen is a sixteen-year-old girl with more issues than Kerrang! Magazine. She's a punk kid and bullied relentlessly for it. Can the daughter of a certain Gerard Way help her get her life on t...
(#) jackalface 2011-12-28 01:24:09 AMThis story is so good, and only four chapters in! Keep at it,
Author's responseThank you very much, personally I think Amber puts most of the genius in this:-) I come up with the skeleton of a chapter and she creates the finished piece. She's an artist but with words.
We're glad you like it:-)
(#) _Amy_Revenge_ 2012-02-01 11:04:26 AMI think the story line is good so far, but you should put more detail in, if that's possible. And I'm kind of curious - do you know where you're going with the story? I'm not trying to sound rude, sorry if it comes off that way, but the way it's written reminds me of the way I used to write when I first started out and I remember not knowing what to put in, or how to write it down, and it either ended up being choppy but finished in the end or just not finished at all. Like I said, the story line definitely sounds good, and I would hate for that to happen with this one. You both have a lot of potential, and God only knows the world needs better literature. :P
Oh, and I'm also curious about another thing: What inspires you to write?
Sorry, I'm a little rusty with reviewing things. I haven't been on here in a really, really long time.
Author's responseWe, um, really try hard with detail you know? We just both think that if stories have too much detail it can become a bit of a drag to read; e.g. Lord Of The Rings.
And yes, we've planned out this story and the sequel. Just lately we've both had a lot going on so our writing has been rushed. But we do know how to write down what me want to write, and we do have an outline of what's going to happen.
Hahaha, that's true. I'm sick of things like Twilight being so popular. I read a chapter of that and then burnt the book:')
Inspires us to write? Hm, we'll for me personally it's expirences I've been through (a lot of these you'll find in there), Amber inspires me so much, music, meaningful lyrics, my lack of friends in the real world, other people's fan fictions I've read, books, films, um, yeah...
And it's cool:-)
ACTUALLY, LORD OF THE RINGS IS FUCKING AWESOME AND DESCRIPTION IS MY NO. 1 PLEASURE, CATIE.
Geez, and you're menna be my best friend! ;D
Anyway, no, I agree. I/we haven't been spending much time on description because so much shit has been going in in my/our lives. But I'll try to include it again, though that's not a promise I can make because life is stressful atm haha.
but thanks for reviewing XD