Link to video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wH5MzRQiKHw&feature=youtu.be
I WILL BE FIXING THIS VIDEO BEFORE THE WEEK IS OUT, BUT I FIGURED YOUD WANT AT LEAST SOMETHING THIS YEAR.
LE EDDI'S NOTES
Well, you can hide a lot about yourself – I_am_a_Graveyard (suggested by mychemicalbitchbot)
Frankie—straightlaced closeted catholic boy with a good relationship with GOD, and a crush on G. Gets drunk at a party, swears for the first time.
Gerard—very UNcloseted gay boy. Wants F BADLY.
Jamia—whoreface We Love God club president
WHERE IS RAY?!?!?!?!?
Once yaoi is mentioned, I shake my head and smile at you precious anime folks. XD
Technical: random words have hyphens in the middle of them, sparse spelling errors.
“Honey, you fell out of the gay tree, hitting every gay branch on the way down, you landed on a gay guy, and you did him.”—Karen Walker
Read chapters 1-6 of 8. Very good writing, very intriguing and—of course—fluffy as a cloud’s ass.
100 ways to torture gerard way – theescapist99 (blackheart101)
12. denailing—gagged and cringed. Holy fuck.
26. forced murder—nearly cried
33. slits between fingers—just reading the title, “FUCKNOFUCKNOFUCKNO”
35 eating fecal matter—again, just reading the title “FUCK. FUCK. FUCKNO!” after I started reading, kept gagging, nearly puked.
Several instances of dreams, upon realizing they are such I go “FUCK!”
Alright, theescapist99, you’re a twisted fuck. I like you. We should get a cup of coffee after this, chat about sadistic stuff. XD
I don’t love you like I did yesterday – xxxfallenangelxxxx (ilovefrankieieroxx)
Xxxfallenangelxxxx – does not want a review done, but DOES want criticism? Confused, but okay. X3
I’m not going to review slash critique her because she said she didn’t want it and I’m not gonna disobey someone’s wishes.
New town, same old…maybe – adrenaline_bomb (cookie_monster)
first chapter—IMO, too many POV shifts,
technical: very friendly upbeat writing style, a few grammar and spelling mistakes.
Feels…mary sue-ish. Not sure if it’s intended, but that’s the vibe im getting. For example “oh, my sisters –or friends, whoever they are—are younger than me, but we’re all in the same grade. And the bit about “kicking open the door to math class and being all ‘hey, we’re the new kids”…Mary Sue.
I’m sorry, but on a scale of one to ten, one being rytin lyk dis and ten being JD Salinger, this story’s a definite and solid three. I mean, some people love mary sue, others—like myself—find her extremely annoying.
First truly negative review. Appy polly loggies, but seriously.
Hopefully you don’t take this bad, cuz you said so yourself in the summary “first fan fic and it’s terrible”
Also, got as far as chapter three.
Pretty eyes – theescapist99 (xblckhrtxx)
sappy story about Gerard getting raped and having his eyeballs dug out, and dealing with the repercussions. Frerard is…I wanna say hinted at, but I’m not sure that’s the appropriate thing to say. a good story nonetheless.
Bella vita – agentkilljoy
poor grammar and sentence structure, incorrect word usage. Mary Sue type of protag. I suppose it has plot; new kid finds best friends in the gang, OC x Mikey pairing. Scale of one to ten: four. Nice solid four, if only because it has something of a plot.
I highly suggest getting a beta, if you don’t already.
You can check out my friend ChloesGreenDay's editting proposal here: http://www.ficwad.com/story/178322
Will you promise me tonight? – cosmiczombie
good-sized oneshot: over 9k words, something that appeals to me. I must say, man. Very moving story. Y’know the typical Gerard is in a shit place and Frank saves him sort of stories. But this just had something special that stuck out to me. No overdone descriptions, no real fancy schmancy “author” shit: it has this sense of realness that a lot of people don’t capture nearly as well as they could. I commend you, for this.
Trying to escape the inevitable – cosmiczombie
so Frankie, the picked on Misfits-loving misfit comes home after a beating, where his best friend—a blue-haired toughie girl (named Ocean, appropriately) who is Frank’s best friend attempts to comfort him. At dinner that night, frank is informed his stepfather’s children are coming to live with them and GUESS WHO THEY ARE?? Gee and Mikes.
Gerard is a bit of a cheerful douche guy, Mikey’s shy.
Cosmiczombie, WHOSE DICK DO I HAVE TO SUCK TO GET AS MANY REVIEW AS YOU???? CUZ I WILL TOTALLY HAVE MY BUDDY SUCK THEIR DICK SO I MAY GET OVER TWENTY REVIEW TOO! XD
Gerard, Y U NO BE NICE TO FRANKIE?
Love the story, can’t wait for an update.
Don’t google yourself – adnarimsamada
“BOTTLE BLONDE!” “-GASPZ- YOU TAKE THAT BACK!”
Has EVERYONE dated pete??
I didn’t read the smut, as I’m not particularly a fan of the boyxboy (especially a motherfucking FOURSOME OF GAYMANSEX, omgizzles. XD
“YOU FUCKED FRANK IN MY WIFE’S CORSET?!”
“why have you turned the van ino gerard?””small dark and smoking”
AND THE TWIST AT THE END-------OOOOOHHHHHH MAAAAAHHHH GOOODD!! I gasped, shrieked, nearly pissed from laughing, had tears in my eyes. Top quality, woman. Top quality.
Was SO hard to not write a review after finishing it. :”)
If I crash on the couch, can I sleep in my clothes – paranoia destroya (vengeful scout)
so, it’s not really catching my interest much. I keep waiting for something to happen.
Gerard and mikey are new. Gee meets frank and immediately falls for him, though they don’t realize that they like each other for a jillion chapters. So they start going out after a while. There’s some sort of OC / Mikey going on. I don’t know. There are OC’s named Amii and Emii, which I can’t pronounce, and it gets confusing which you’re talking about.
The damned and the devine – vengeful scout
one thing I’ll say is that the dialogue is all pushed into one big paragraph, when it would make more sense to split it up. Being in one big paragraph tends to make it confusing as to whoh is talking about what (also contributing to that is a lack of commas)
pretty good job at being frightening.
Animal – rocket_dog (mikeywayily)
pet peeve: the paragraphs are weird.
Basically frank and company go to raid an animaltesting place and frank finds gerard and takes him home
SPELLCHECK / GRAMMAR CHECK IS YOUR BEST FRIEND
Very original concept. Like the idea very much.
Die school musical – scarlet_fitch2027 (mikeywayily)
“ONLY BY LOSING CAN WE RECOGNISE A WIN!” screams Frank.
“WE’RE NEVER GOING TO WIN ANYTHING!”
“THE SEX PISTOLS NEVER WON ANYTHING!”
“THAT WAS BACK IN THE SEVENTIES, NO ONE WON ANYTHING!”
“THE SEVENTIES PRODUCED SOME OF THE BEST MUSIC OF ALL TIME!”
“BECAUSE EVERYONE WAS TOO DEPRESSED TO DO ANYTHING ELSE!”
“ARE YOU SAYING YOU DON’T LIKE THE SEVENTIES?”
“MAYBE I AM!”
Fucking hilarious. Loved it. Seriously. One of the faves of the week. C:
The local scene – missfunghoul57
Not particularly engaging. Kinda cute, I guess, and the writing style’s alright, but it just doesn’t really keep my interest. The dialogue tags are kind of confusing. Just my opinion.
Corrode – spiderduck2
so you’ve got this really good like letter to gerard from mikey. Mikey has apparently been drunk since age six or so and nobody fucking notices. Poor guy. That’s all he wants is for his big brother to notice him, but he’s too busy being the center of attention. Nobody notices mikey. :c
very well-written. Enjoyed it very much.
dance dance – spiderduck2
Gerard has sexy dance moves. Mostly a little rant by Frank about how Gerard is such a fuckin stripper and a tease. XD it’s cute
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