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Episode 7 Complete.
6 Reviews(for real this time)
Eddi The Ficritic Episode 7
Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1taB4kGuDBM&feature=youtu.be
(I just fixed it as of 5:30 EST, 4th of March, 2012) YouTube is being a bitchface. Apologies.
http://mychemicalslash.livejournal.com/2880801.html
-- xunderzenithx, The Dove Keeper (Suggested by XxLaylaXx)
Read Chapter One. A bit stiff for my taste. Basically, Frank describing he and his friends as they try to score booze off of artsy fartsy Gerard, who ends up dumping a can of paint all over Frank’s head because Frank’s friend kept calling Gerard a fag. Really, not a lot happens in the first chapter. It’s mostly descriptions (it’s the opposite of what I write, basically) Good plot.
7.2/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/125179
-- browser18, Once Upon a Crime (suggested by xblckhrtxx)
Read chapter one. Gerard and Mikey’s dad is in the mafia, as are Frank’s dad and an OC named Anna (who’s sweet on Gerard)’s family, I think. They speak very Italian-American from the 20’s-ish. Love that the dialect keeps with the times. I obviously didn’t’ read enough to get the whole plot, but it’s very intriguing right from the get go, so check it out.
8/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/170385
-- ShadowSouls, Saturday Night (Suggested by KristenBitch)
The tense is mixed up. One second it’s present, the next it’s past. Might have just been in one chapter, though. I dunno. Good plotline (Gerard’s a serial killer, Frankie has a crush on him, Gerard decides to take advantage of Frank’s crush). The whole “ohmigod i have a crush” thing on Frank’s part was a little rushed, but other than that, I think you’re doing great with it.
7.1/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/134722
-- Disenchantedxo, Photograph (Suggested by MCR_Vampire_321)
Oh, yanno, just your usual cliché “omg, I’m an abused female who was a childhood friend of the Way Bros, I used to date Gee, and now we’ve reunited and I’m going on tour with MCR (who I had no idea who they were, even though they’re famous) with my best friend to get away from my abusive boyfriend and live happily evar aftar!”
It’s alright. About a 6 on the 10 scale. Nothing wrong grammatically or spelling-wise; just too cliché for my taste.
http://ficwad.com/story/157608
--MyPatheticRomance, Frerard A-Z
OMG, I read this when it first started and I fucking love it. It’s 26 different fluffy frerard oneshots that take place in random points in time, although some of them tie back to each other.
Technical stuff: most all of the dialogue tags are in the same format (ie, Frank announced, Bob said, he finished, he laughed; all of them coming after the dialogue.) so, consider experimenting with your tags, putting them in different ways.
7.4/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/164037
-- ZombieSlayer13, You Only Live Forever In The Lights You Make (suggested by VengefulScout)
Technical: not very varied in sentence structure. Follows the pattern of “subject, verb, compliment” quite often. Rarely begins differently. I think you had too many characters that you wanted to fit in in a short period of time (don’t worry, I’m guilty of this too). The word “said” is used for almost all dialogue tags.
I gotta hand it to you, though, it’s got a decent storyline, even though it’s a bit erratic. Basically, a group of teenaged killjoys are going to do…something. They have missions and stuff. Hell, I’m not exactly sure what’s going on. I read about…7 chapters for the sake of time. I like how you try to incorporate history from a character in each chapter, but find a way to make it more natural, if you ever rewrite it.
5.8 out of 10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/179335
--Vengefulscout, Desert Song
It’s raining in the desert. That’s my first problem with the fic. Second, it’s all very “SAVE YOURSELLLLLLLLVES AND I’LL HOLD THEM BACK TONIGHT!!!” Maybe it’s because I’m in a sadistic mood, but I laughed at the end of this oneshot. It just…it felt so cheesy. I’m not saying it wasn’t well written, it was just cliché. I know it was supposed to be heartbreaking and sad and romantic, but it felt so overdramatic to me.
6/10
http://ficwad.com/story/163489
--AlbinoBlackSheep, Drowning Lessons (suggested by allwasgoldeninthesky)
My god, I feel like the world’s biggest cunt today, but I can’t take these deathfics seriously. Maybe I should redo my reviews when I’m in more of a down-in-the-dumps mood…nah.
It was a very nice deathfic, in all seriousness. It felt more realistic than most of them. The guys were certainly more accepting of their ultimate demise than most would think (that’s probably what threw me off at first), but all in all, my sister read it and was pretty moved. I just cackled like the sadistic, cynical fuck I am.
7/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/180893
--mychemicalbotchbot, Fuck the title, I can’t think of one
It’s…it’s got a special something about it. I can’t put my finger on it. Sure, the paragraphs are short, but who cares, man.
Basically, you’ve got Gerard, popular guy with something to hide (the murder of his parents, and his brother’s suicide[omg that rhymed and I didn’t even try! {and so did that!!} That’s going in a song])
Anyways, Gerard acts preppy at school, and punk at home. He gets taken in by the Ieros as a foster child and Frank has a crush on him, and is intrigued by Gerard’s total opposing public and private selves.
7.6/10
Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1taB4kGuDBM&feature=youtu.be
(I just fixed it as of 5:30 EST, 4th of March, 2012) YouTube is being a bitchface. Apologies.
http://mychemicalslash.livejournal.com/2880801.html
-- xunderzenithx, The Dove Keeper (Suggested by XxLaylaXx)
Read Chapter One. A bit stiff for my taste. Basically, Frank describing he and his friends as they try to score booze off of artsy fartsy Gerard, who ends up dumping a can of paint all over Frank’s head because Frank’s friend kept calling Gerard a fag. Really, not a lot happens in the first chapter. It’s mostly descriptions (it’s the opposite of what I write, basically) Good plot.
7.2/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/125179
-- browser18, Once Upon a Crime (suggested by xblckhrtxx)
Read chapter one. Gerard and Mikey’s dad is in the mafia, as are Frank’s dad and an OC named Anna (who’s sweet on Gerard)’s family, I think. They speak very Italian-American from the 20’s-ish. Love that the dialect keeps with the times. I obviously didn’t’ read enough to get the whole plot, but it’s very intriguing right from the get go, so check it out.
8/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/170385
-- ShadowSouls, Saturday Night (Suggested by KristenBitch)
The tense is mixed up. One second it’s present, the next it’s past. Might have just been in one chapter, though. I dunno. Good plotline (Gerard’s a serial killer, Frankie has a crush on him, Gerard decides to take advantage of Frank’s crush). The whole “ohmigod i have a crush” thing on Frank’s part was a little rushed, but other than that, I think you’re doing great with it.
7.1/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/134722
-- Disenchantedxo, Photograph (Suggested by MCR_Vampire_321)
Oh, yanno, just your usual cliché “omg, I’m an abused female who was a childhood friend of the Way Bros, I used to date Gee, and now we’ve reunited and I’m going on tour with MCR (who I had no idea who they were, even though they’re famous) with my best friend to get away from my abusive boyfriend and live happily evar aftar!”
It’s alright. About a 6 on the 10 scale. Nothing wrong grammatically or spelling-wise; just too cliché for my taste.
http://ficwad.com/story/157608
--MyPatheticRomance, Frerard A-Z
OMG, I read this when it first started and I fucking love it. It’s 26 different fluffy frerard oneshots that take place in random points in time, although some of them tie back to each other.
Technical stuff: most all of the dialogue tags are in the same format (ie, Frank announced, Bob said, he finished, he laughed; all of them coming after the dialogue.) so, consider experimenting with your tags, putting them in different ways.
7.4/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/164037
-- ZombieSlayer13, You Only Live Forever In The Lights You Make (suggested by VengefulScout)
Technical: not very varied in sentence structure. Follows the pattern of “subject, verb, compliment” quite often. Rarely begins differently. I think you had too many characters that you wanted to fit in in a short period of time (don’t worry, I’m guilty of this too). The word “said” is used for almost all dialogue tags.
I gotta hand it to you, though, it’s got a decent storyline, even though it’s a bit erratic. Basically, a group of teenaged killjoys are going to do…something. They have missions and stuff. Hell, I’m not exactly sure what’s going on. I read about…7 chapters for the sake of time. I like how you try to incorporate history from a character in each chapter, but find a way to make it more natural, if you ever rewrite it.
5.8 out of 10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/179335
--Vengefulscout, Desert Song
It’s raining in the desert. That’s my first problem with the fic. Second, it’s all very “SAVE YOURSELLLLLLLLVES AND I’LL HOLD THEM BACK TONIGHT!!!” Maybe it’s because I’m in a sadistic mood, but I laughed at the end of this oneshot. It just…it felt so cheesy. I’m not saying it wasn’t well written, it was just cliché. I know it was supposed to be heartbreaking and sad and romantic, but it felt so overdramatic to me.
6/10
http://ficwad.com/story/163489
--AlbinoBlackSheep, Drowning Lessons (suggested by allwasgoldeninthesky)
My god, I feel like the world’s biggest cunt today, but I can’t take these deathfics seriously. Maybe I should redo my reviews when I’m in more of a down-in-the-dumps mood…nah.
It was a very nice deathfic, in all seriousness. It felt more realistic than most of them. The guys were certainly more accepting of their ultimate demise than most would think (that’s probably what threw me off at first), but all in all, my sister read it and was pretty moved. I just cackled like the sadistic, cynical fuck I am.
7/10
http://www.ficwad.com/story/180893
--mychemicalbotchbot, Fuck the title, I can’t think of one
It’s…it’s got a special something about it. I can’t put my finger on it. Sure, the paragraphs are short, but who cares, man.
Basically, you’ve got Gerard, popular guy with something to hide (the murder of his parents, and his brother’s suicide[omg that rhymed and I didn’t even try! {and so did that!!} That’s going in a song])
Anyways, Gerard acts preppy at school, and punk at home. He gets taken in by the Ieros as a foster child and Frank has a crush on him, and is intrigued by Gerard’s total opposing public and private selves.
7.6/10
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