Will Lou be stuck in the apartment forever, doomed to die of starvation? Who will save her?
(#) XxPerfectTomorrowxX 2012-03-14 04:33:34 AMOh my efffingggg goodness. This chapter had so much emotion. Bad me for reading this while listening to 'Everybody Hurts by Avril Lavigne'- it went together so freaking wonderfully for this chapter.
I don't find it unbelievable that she ran off. With that much emotion going on... People tend to run away, even if it's not the best thing.
I CAN NOT believe her parents (who I want to brutally murder in the world of make believe) told him that shit about her! AND AS IF THAT MAKES IT OKAY THAT THEY JUST LEFT HER! I was so angry. I had to stop reading right there because I was extremely, extremely angry... So great job with relaying the emotions in this chapter!
Her freaking brother, believing that shit. BAD CHRIS!
Oh and when she asks him how it feels to be loved... Ah, that line just summed up the entire chapter making the emotion drip out.
This chapter was perfection.
Author's responseHah, I haven't heard that song... I'm not really a fan of Avril Lavigne.
That's good. I had the idea, and I wrote, then I went back and looked at it and went, "Ehhhhh....". But that's good that it's believable. Even if only slightly. XD
Haha, yeah, her parents aren't the greatest. You'll be interested to read chapter 7B, then. That's Chris' meeting with them. Yay, more emotion-relaying win! XD I'm glad I'm getting that right.
Well, he hadn't heard Lou's side of the story... and generally your parents don't lie to you... What else was he supposed to think?
Yeah, I was really aiming for that line to have a big effect. Like in ...Tacks for Snacks, with the last two lines. :)
Okay, seriously. You have NOOOOOOOOOOO idea how much reading that last line killed me. Seriously, you had me (me, who is a tomboy and hates anything girly and all the girling things like swooning)fucking SQUEALING over your review. Embarrassing, but this is the effect you have on me, woman! Love you and your reviews. :3 'Nuff said.
(#) shortstacklover 2012-04-03 10:15:03 PMOMG JON TO THE RESCUE!!!!!
IM ABOUT TO MURDER, EAT, REGURGITATE AND THEN STAB HER PARENTS AGAIN. Grrr ry ry spence jwalk and bden to the rescue!!!! :DDD you should have made her nomnomnom on some dog treats X) omnomnom tasty! Hahaha I don't have ugh else to say so I'm going to review and I promise to do another really long review on another on k? Promise promise promise! X)
Author's responseI know! I wanted to give him a big part cause he's overlooked most of the time.
I think that's what most people are about to do... They're not exactly the most understanding of parents.
Yay, atleast you reviewed; that made me happy. I'll be waiting for your next one! XD