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"Lips open yet without breath, A stunning caricature of death." Feedback hugely appreciated. :)
(#) tortillachip 2012-04-12 05:35:49 PMThis is amazing! You manage to capture so much emotion in this poem. It's extremely thought provoking and really brings up strong imagery. It's very well written and kind of reminds you that these things happen really do happen. You hear about it all the time, but this just makes it seem so much more real. This is so engaging and heartfelt and just beautiful. This is truly original and ingenious. Marvelous job!!!
Author's responseThank you very much! I'm pleased you think that this is thought-provoking; as a writer that's the greatest thing I can hope to achieve! This stuff really does happen and it is very real, something that I think people find hard to believe/remember because it is an ugly truth in a world that we all want to be beautiful.
Thank you soooooo much for such a lovely review! :D
(#) CosmicZombie 2012-04-13 10:27:00 AMDuuuuuuuuude! Get un-talented, seriously! Uhh...no idea if that made any sense :L
Anyway, I loved this to bits...beautifully macabre and sad and really though-provoking and insightful. The language was exquisite and the rhythm was perfect. One of my all-time favourite poems of yours. Just outstanding.
This was probably my favourite line;
A stunning caricature of death.
Wonderful. I'm gunna stop gushing now though- I hope you aren't getting sick of my reviews!
Author's responseHaha, thank you very much! :D
I'm extremely pleased that you liked it, I was worried that it was dull/dragged out. I normally fail with rhythm, so it's super nice that you thought it was alright!
Thank you so, sooooo, soooooooooooooooo very much for taking the time to leave such a lovely, kind review! :D
(#) snake56tongue 2012-04-14 11:34:27 AMWow.... just wow...
You have such a way with words, like, seriously...
Snake56Tongue has been reported missing after she stormed off in a fit of jealous rage over your writing skills...
But, yeah, anyway..
This is incredible, and you are just as talented at poems as you are at stories :)
I loved the description you used, and the last line totally completed the stunning-ness (is this a word?) of the poem :)
Author's responseAw, thank you very much!
Don't be jealous of my writing, it really isn't all that great. I just have way too much time on my hands.
Thank you very, very much for leaving such a kind review; it really does mean a lot to me! :D