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Chop.

"Fifteen separate body parts, all perfectly preserved." Quite a creepy poem, feedback would be very much appreciated, even if it's to tell me I'm a maniac.

Category: Poetry - Rating: PG - Genres:  - Characters:  - Published: 2012/04/14 - Updated: 2012/04/15 - 138 words

Reviews

• Chop.

  (#) tortillachip 2012-04-14 06:04:21 PM

  This is a great poem! Sure, it's a bit creepy, but it was very creative. I think it has such a nice flow to it and I can see the scene in my head very clearly. This is really amazing. I love this!!!

  Author's response

  Thank you! I'm glad you could picture it well, that's what I was aiming for.

• Chop.

  (#) snake56tongue 2012-04-14 06:06:51 PM

  Woah...
  This is incredible! Like, seriously, I just...
  I love how creepy it is! Man, you sound like a serial killer :D (I have a weird obsession with serial killers, so you could kinda take that as a compliment :D)
  Also, it sounds a bit like the Lovely Bones?
  Anyway, it was amazing, well done for writing such an incredible poem :)

  Author's response

  Thank you so much! And I have some weird obsession with serial killers too, I love them :D it actually reminded me of the Lovely Bones after I'd written it, weird....anyway, thank you again for a lovely review!

• Chop.

  (#) CosmicZombie 2012-04-28 08:06:01 AM

  This created such a vivid image- I loved the ambiance. Creepy, but in such a creative and interesting way. It totally reminded me of The Lovely Bones too (take that as a HUGE compliment- I love that story)...thank you for writing such a brilliant poem. I really like your style.
  
  CosmicZombie xo

  Author's response

  Thank you! I love creepy things so I'm glad you think it was interestingly creepy :) and I didn't even realise how much it was like The Lovely Bones until I read back through it. Thank you for reviewing, I'm just pleased you enjoyed my writing!

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