COLLAB-O/C: Bethany Hudson is a 20 year old mother who works in starbucks. Under the laws of witness protection,she has had a rather bad life in Britian and is trying to make it work in LA
(#) XxPerfectTomorrowxX 2012-06-18 04:14:41 PMThis seems like it could be good. It has potential definitely and I could see reading more if you posted, and if you used spell check.
I really hope this doesn't come off offensively but the spelling is awful. Just in the title, it's 'heartbreak- not heartbrake.'
The summary: 'Starbucks?' 'witness' 'Britain?'
Sorry but there are way too many ways to check your spelling online for this to be an issue.
Good luck with continued writing though and I hope to see more for this story. :)
I've fixed the words you pointed out.
but if you where walking about the spellings in Joshua's speech. Its suppose to be bad. Just saying :)
- Like it so far. Can't wait to see more!
(#) MissAbbieHudson 2012-06-19 08:30:15 AMLove it Hon :D cannot wait for the next chapter :DxoxoxoxoA (L)
(#) SimplexMinded 2012-06-20 08:34:51 PMthis is really awesome! Please updade soon!