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My Heart

"I'm giving it to you. At least until yours is healed enough." I smile at him. His teary eyes gazed into mine. With a big grin, he put his hand over it as if protecting it. "Thanks." *RYDEN ONESHOT*

Category: Panic! At The Disco - Rating: R - Genres: Romance - Characters:  - Published: 2012/08/02 - Updated: 2012/08/02 - 334 words - Complete

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• My Heart

  (#) anonymowriter 2012-08-05 01:18:28 AM

  It's adorable. But as a bit of constructive criticism... I'd say that it would be a good idea to put in a little more background before he gives him the paper. Because the reader didn't know that he liked him, not really. It's not very apparent at all. It seemed a bit sudden. Like you could put in flashbacks or put in some description of how he feels, you know? I hope that helped. I did like it though. It was really cute.

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