Whoa whoa whoooaaa. Creepy stuff, dude. Loving the way you built it up slowly and then with that crazy climax at the end. Also it flowed really well and the rhymes weren't cheesey which was nice. Great work.
Oh geez thanks! I wrote it when I was deleriously tired. I'd been up all night watching Marble Hornets for the first time and couldn't fall asleep...my friend telling me that she "hopes Slenderman slithers in through my window" while I sleep didn't help.
Anyway, thanks! I'm glad you think that! I'm sure it could be better but I'm glad you liked it. :)