Hermione Weasley makes a desperate journey into the past to change the future.
(#) wolfboy7623 2012-09-10 01:11:03 PM
This has the potential to be a great story. I look forward to seeing how things progress. Adding dates, or some other idea of when these events are occurring would be helpful as well
This is a really good story and would do well as the prologue for a full length fic.
9/10 points for style.
(#) Chris7100 2012-09-13 05:40:36 AM
Have to agree with the other reviewers. I'd love to see this as the prologue to a long, AU retelling of the HP saga. I hope you'll attempt it. Well done!
(#) happyreader 2012-09-13 06:40:17 AM
A very nice short fanfic. I am not so sure that anything less than a novel length saga would be an improvement over this fine compact tale. bye..........1happyreader
(#) Darkmark66 2012-09-13 08:59:56 AM
This was really good once I started reading I could not stop. Well said about Albus, Harry and even about poor Luna her time at the Malfoy's had to be terrible.
I would like to read more on this was Harry saved, did he achieve his potential was the world saved. How did Albus react.
Thanks for the mention of Gabrielle I do like her and have always thought she and Fleur got a bad deal in the books.
Thanks for this.
(#) mrpietan 2012-09-16 09:35:01 PM
Very great potential here. Well written. Now, you can either do this in one of two ways ... continue the story as is or give us the backstory. :)
Thanks for the slash warning, even though it was only suggested, tch. Aaanyway, that was a very, very well written piece, despite my dislike of the slash angle I really enjoyed reading it.
(#) pott4grager 2012-09-25 08:12:31 PM
I was unsure at first whether to read the story or not, but when I started I was GRIPPED. A truly magnificent short story which, as other reviewers have said, is a tremendous springboard for a full length AU fic that would put JKR's books to shame. Gather your courage in both hands and write it, you will have plenty of review support.
Rated 10/10 but keep the slash out of it.
(#) genna 2012-10-04 04:28:42 PM
It reminds me a little bit of the Starship Hedwig by Ynyr, but much more specifically detailed.
I am a fan.
(#) Cateagle 2012-12-04 06:30:12 AM
That was intense, and poignant. It stands alone well, but I agree with others that it could serve as an intro to a long and powerful AU story.