ahhh yes, good stuff, I really do love the plot line it's so interesting. I'm really captivated.
Just come creative criticism XD there where quit a few spelling and grammar errors (especially at the end) but it's all pretty much easy to fix stuff XD.
A few of the other chapters also need editing and checked for spelling and grammar.
but I still love it XD.
I can be really awful at spelling and grammar but i will get around to fixing the problems :D and im so glad your enjoying it!!