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Unexpected Discoveries

Crowley discovers something Aziraphale would rather keep secret.

Category: Good Omens - Rating: PG - Genres: Humor - Characters: Aziraphale, Crowley - Published: 2006/07/17 - Updated: 2006/07/18 - 685 words - Complete

Reviews

• Unexpected Discoveries

  (#) Sindeniirelle 2006-10-20 03:44:45 PM

  rofl
  
  I really wasn't expecting those last couple of lines there, really wasn't. Great fun.

• Unexpected Discoveries

  (#) MarkPoa 2006-12-27 05:23:39 PM

  Heh... quite fun... but the last "What?" seemed to be anticlimatic. I don't see Crowley reacting that way. If you're planning to revise this, maybe a more witty or pedantic reaction from Crowley be better. Like falling out of his chair or something. (...I'm kidding about that slapstick suggestion. :P) I'd imagine Crowley is more likely to have his eyes widen, be silent for moment and say "ah, I see... say no more, say no more..." like a bad Eric Idle impersonator.

• Unexpected Discoveries

  (#) MarkPoa 2006-12-27 05:25:39 PM

  Or alternatively, now that I think about it, ask Azizaraphale if he, by chance, took the condoms orally... but that's me being silly. :P

• Unexpected Discoveries

  (#) Ithilwen 2007-03-29 05:31:45 PM

  Ah, leaving his flat and all his beautiful houseplants...
  
  Tense issue: "over two years earlier," not "ago."
  
  "child, making Crowley smirk"
  
  Oho, did he have a hand in it then?
  
  Heh, amusing.

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