Gaaaaaaaaawsh. Is anybody reading this? Hah...anyhow. It's still a chapter.
- Ahem, I forgot....
Hehe, you love it, Mikey.
Author's responseI have way too much love for it. To the point where I'm starting to worry.
No. Really. I beg of you. Tell me...
WHY IS THAT STILL FUNNY?!?! I'm like, laughing out musical notes which is very difficult to achieve because I sound like a drunk camel when I sing.
(#) CatscanFlyy 2013-01-06 05:04:04 AMHey. So, I've just finished reading and I think you're right about it being confusing but you actually have a really interesting style of writing and this story has a lot of potential.
Seriously, if you give yourself an accurate description for the main MCR page you'll probably pick up a lot more readers. The only other things I would suggest are lengthier chapters (1000 to 3000 words is good) and more character explanation, like, I assume you're trying to make Frank quite a confusing/ shady character but as a reader I have no idea what's going on with him and it makes it really hard for me to like him as, what I'm assuming he is, the story's protagonist.
But really carry on, I'll look out for updates and I've done you a cover. If you don't like it you can let me know and I'll give it another go.