I smiled as he begged. It made me so much more sure of what I was doing.
(#) BertMcCrackalackin 2013-01-11 05:34:36 PMI like this so far. When I saw there was a new chapter I was like "Oh hey there" XD
I noticed a few spelling and autocorrect errors, though. Do you proofread your chapters? I would suggest doing that, and maybe adding some more detail. Other that that stuff, It was great!
Author's responseUsually yeah I do but I was like half asleep for the last half of it so I just published it and went to sleep. I just edited it though