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Vegas Dusk

by nerds_assemble 4 Reviews

Dudes, I need your help! Please like, give me some ideas on how to finish this. It's the first story I've written in first person.

Category: Drama - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Drama,Fantasy - Characters:  - Published: 2013/01/29 - Updated: 2013/01/29 - 684 words


  • Vegas Dusk

    (#) BipolarUnicorn 2013-01-29 04:44:18 PM

    End it with something that no one expects those kind of endings are the best.

    I have no clue how I would end this. But this was like really awesome. Like I really like this. I mostly stick to poetry cause I'm horrible with like short stories/one-shots, etc.

    But this is really awesome, sorry I have no ideas, my brain doesn't work right now.


    Author's response

    Heheh, helluva help you are. ;)

    Thank youuuuuuuuuuuz. I will try very hard to end it with sass. Because at midnight when you're throat's swelling up, sass will put its' ass to work. FORGET THE SORE THROAT...

    Sorry, I've had a total of eight hours of sleep in the last two..well, going on three days.

    Yep. Three. I've a vitamin D deficiency too.
  • Vegas Dusk

    (#) BipolarUnicorn 2013-01-29 04:56:06 PM

    I also really like the first person and plot. It's awesome.

    Bitch if I saw some creature in the road with wings and it said it was me, I would be like-


    Then I'd like set it on fire or some shit. Cause I'm like that cool.

    Author's response

    THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!

    ...'re a one-creature species, aren't you?
  • Vegas Dusk

    (#) upinflames 2013-01-29 05:51:51 PM

    wait, isn't this second person or am i stupider than i thought.

    also, according to my laptop, stupider is a word. weird.

    Author's response

    I am stupider than I thought. Which is really low.

    Yep, the world classifies this as second person.

    Trust no one; only technology.
  • Vegas Dusk

    (#) Mirazal 2013-01-29 06:17:29 PM

    Yeah, I thought this was second person...

    And omfg RAH RAH I DON'T UNDERSTAND THIS BUT I LOVE THIS SO FREAKING MUCH which also may be why I can't help you. :/ I wouldn't know how. Sorreh...

    But it's really fucking beautiful.

    Author's response

    It is. I'm just an idiot.

    Thank you so much! Jesus, dude, my ego like, almost loves you more than me. ;)

    THANK YOU M!!! I will respond to your email soon! It's just so long and I've got so much stuff to do (bloody homework, contests, bloody homework, sick dogs, fucking homework) but I will respond!

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