*Self harm trigger. Read with caution*
- This Story has so many elements and depth. It has the making for a real good drama. It has the meat and the potatoes.
The only thing that I would tell you is to spend some time on character development right in the beginning. Spend about a chapter getting telling about all characters and plots of the story. This enables your readers to understand the depth of the character throughout the reading. Try to use Chapter one as your thesis.