The sweet couple breaks up, will they get back together... and will it stay that way?
(#) Princess_Rixie 2006-09-04 12:51:11 PMNice poem. I especially liked the line that broke up the three-line stanzas. Very unique, and it adds a creative touch.
However, you said in the second part that the man did not wish to talk, but then they started talking. Is that a mix-up or was that intentional. If not, I'd suggest fixing it.
Very lovely poem. I'm not a great poet myself, so I appreciate anyone who can write good poetry.
Author's responsethat was on purpose, that part. he didnt want to talk, but she persuaded him to and they did. thanks for your review!