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These Sins Do Tell

DMC Spoilers, Oneshot. Set directly after movie. He saw the kiss, but what hurt him the most was not her infidelity. What shamed him was that she had betrayed a friend. . . .

Category: Pirates of the Caribbean - Rating: PG - Genres: Drama - Characters: Elizabeth, Will - Warnings: [!!] - Published: 2006/09/05 - Updated: 2006/09/05 - 1257 words - Complete

Reviews

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) exdee 2006-09-05 08:19:40 PM

  "I could never have guessed that gambling with my soul could be less frightening then throwing away my heart."
  
  This line makes the fic work for me; it shows how difficult it is for Will to do this. It's a bleak fic, but it works. I think their voices are both captured well, as well as the sense of Elizabeth being infinitely more "pirate" than Will. I hope Disney doesn't chicken out of doing something like this for #3...

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) PatriciaLouise 2006-09-07 09:42:55 AM

  I really, really, really couldn't believe what Elizabeth had done!!!!! Grrrrr...great fic though.

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) grissom500 2006-09-25 01:37:01 PM

  I think Will's reaction is very appropriate. I think as well that you captured their voices. I have one critism, I wonder if it wouldn't be better in third person. This story is really about two sides, and though Will is the one suffering the betrayl, Elizabeth killed a man and you wrote her pain through her dailouge well, and Will expressed his, so I'm not sure first person is nessiary.
  It's a good story nonetheless. I genuinly enjoyed this, and I'm glad you made Elizabeth responsible with out making her the bad guy.
  Thank you for writing this!

  Author's response

  You know, I really hadn't thought about putting it in a different POV. Thanks for the suggestion. OH, and thanks for the review as well. Very kind of you!

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) Madcap 2006-09-29 05:36:24 PM

  I feel there is a lot to be explained in the movie to come, but I do like your explanation. Will may be a touch dense at times, but he's never been a total idiot. He would know Elizabeth better than anyone else, and with his sense of honour, I think you captured that well.

  Author's response

  Thank you so much! I think Will does know her very well--better than he'd probably like when it comes to her confusion with Jack. Thanks for the review!!!

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) herk444 2006-10-04 07:59:41 AM

  Bwahaha. Will gets his revenge, but I like the way he is more angry about how she deceived Capt. Jack rather than her just kissing him. Ahh, in my view Will and ELizabeth are a sickening couple to begin with, he should have broken it off and left her crying on the floor.
  
  Ok, so, yeah. That was the bad grade I got on a quiz speaking.... >_>
  
  --herkie!
  
  ((very good))

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) Malaika-Pyralis 2006-10-13 02:25:29 PM

  ooohhh - I love it. The fact that Will confronts Elizabeth about what she has done . . . I was afraid that you would simply make her the antagonist, but you still gave her that hope for redemption. I thought that this was very much like a Buffy the Vampire Slayer episode actually, but I still think that you captured the dichotomy of her decisions very well.

• These Sins Do Tell

  (#) Malaika-Pyralis 2006-10-13 02:25:42 PM

  ooohhh - I love it. The fact that Will confronts Elizabeth about what she has done . . . I was afraid that you would simply make her the antagonist, but you still gave her that hope for redemption. I thought that this was very much like a Buffy the Vampire Slayer episode actually, but I still think that you captured the dichotomy of her decisions very well.

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