(#) Jessi_Girl9 2006-09-07this is pretty good.
to make it better i'd have to say... well, separate paragraphs for dialogue, like what jennieman or story_master or Coffeebean... there's too many to name, but you can check out how they have a different paragraph for each person when they talk... otherwise, it's perfect! keep up the great work! and update SOON!
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