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50 Breaths

Actions and reactions. Kyo/Hatsuharu challenge.

Category: Fruits Basket - Rating: R - Genres: Angst, Drama, Humor, Romance - Characters: Akito, Hatori, Hatsuharu, Kyo - Warnings: [!!] - Published: 2006/09/19 - Updated: 2006/09/20 - 1321 words - Complete

Reviews

• 50 Breaths

  (#) mjules 2006-09-24 05:15:49 PM

  This was quite clever; so many poignant moments with different flavors and textures to them. You remained very true to their personalities and made the relationship plausible. And all this in one-sentence fragments!

• 50 Breaths

  (#) MsCommandersons 2007-01-26 06:18:57 PM

  I'm not certain how to rate this story!
  
  It was hot:
  Slammed up against protesting wood, the grey-eyed boy let his fingers dig into the grain as a clever tongue traced a line across his neck.
  
  It was funny:
  While Ayame whirled around the room displaying his latest fashion creation, Haru commented that it would match Kyo's complexion perfectly; the three-way chase that ensued was worth a bruised arm or two.
  
  It was frightening:
  "Three can keep a secret if two of them are..." Akito whispered, finger tracing a pattern over polished oak before slamming his fist down hard enough to crack.
  
  And poignant:
  
  Autumn left a carpet of dried leaves on the ground and Kyo broke them with every step, without a care; they were only dead things, in the end.
  
  Beautifully written! I must read more of your work!

• 50 Breaths

  (#) kaden292 2007-06-29 10:25:05 PM

  Is this a challenge for someone else to do or something you did, because I ambe very tempted to continue a story for this challenge!!!

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