Lulu remembered the rare moment spent with the legendary guardian as she attempted to trace the paths they had walked.
- Ack, I thought I'd reviewed this! O.o It's lovely and soothing, yet again. I like the extremely quiet and natural way they come together... it's really a bit more plausible than the "leap and screw" type of story.English fixes: "explore her" isn't quite the write phrase; it sounds very physical. "interrogate her" might work better, or change it to "explore her secrets" or some other thing so it doesn't sound sexual. The melancholy but not drowning-in-angst pilgrimage that Lulu makes is very well done, and the pyrefly at the end captures the whole essence of the piece: small, subtle, poignant.
"with reasons being other than" --> "for reasons other than"
period/new sentence after "respecting the woman", or just make it a ;
"the greatest legendary guardian" or "the greatest OF legendary guardians"
"could only happened" --> "could only happen"
"despite of him being" --> "despite his being"
"reliving every moments" -- "reliving all the moments" or just drop "every", which is singular, strangely enough
"she would remembered " --> would remember [[this is a quirk of English that has been tricking you: when using "was" "would" "could" or "had" + another verb, the first word shows the time/tense, the second word only shows the meaning. The second word therefore doesn't have the -ed at the end.]]
"trying to find him back" feels a bit awkward. "call him back"?