And he is dying, lying immobile on the floor, and all he can think about is where his siblings are because Peter has always been that sort of person.
(#) bgoldnyxnet 2008-12-16 03:25:50 PMI'm about out of rating points, but I think the last rating I saw got it right: ambience.
This felt real. Lewis kind of glossed over the whole dying thing -- a sudden jolt, and they're in Narnia but more real than the real one.
If I were to make one change, I would take out the phrase, "Peter was that kind of person." Just let the actions and thoughts convey what needs to be said -- they don't need any author's P.O.V. comments.
But even that's a minor quibble. Thank you.