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The Girl and the Wolf

Rating is for violence. Part Based on a dream I had once, and it's also part of another story I'm writing. This is just a very rough draft, but i decided to post it for now, because i don't have mu...

Category: Fantasy - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Romance - Characters:  - Warnings: [V] - Published: 2006/11/07 - Updated: 2006/11/08 - 283 words

Reviews

• The Girl and the Wolf

  (#) copperose 2006-11-07 05:36:40 PM

  Paragraph breaks are your friend. You should use them to separate speech by different characters.

• The Girl and the Wolf

  (#) Redsliver 2006-11-08 09:13:47 AM

  That's like a very twisted children's book. It would be amazing with pictures.
  
  Try and add a few paragraph breaks, it'll improve readability.

• The Girl and the Wolf

  (#) elizedward23 2006-11-10 09:12:38 PM

  All stories should answer the how, why, when, where, and who. Why was the wolf attacking the girl? etc. Different viewpoints would make this more interesting like the wolf's POV.

  Author's response

  Thank you very much. I will work on that with the full version of my story. It's slow going, but hopefully i can get the first chapter up soon.

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