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• Truth

  (#) dkg 2006-11-08

  i dont know i like it and yet i dont. i dont know how to explain it...but it is original

  Author's response

  umm....how wonderful of u to tell me that...next time expand :P
  
  but i think i get what ur saying!

• Truth

  (#) Rous 2006-11-10

  Again, a nice post. Your thoughts are coherent and concise. If you are going to capitalize the first word of the sentence, though, you need to follow through and do all of them.
  
  "...the truth that leaves me
  to quake and quiver at my knees..."
  
  I am not sure "leaves" is the best word here. "leaves me quaking and quivering..." or "causes me to quake and quiver...". It is a subtle difference, but one, nonetheless.
  
  "The longiness to tell
  is forgotten..."
  
  The word should be "longing".
  
  Other than these few things, another good write.
  
  Thank you for sharing.
  
  rous

  Author's response

  ahh...thanks for the grammatical mistakes caught there...sometimes i just dont captalize words :P
  
  but thanks for the tips :)

• Truth

  (#) Ithilwen 2006-11-27

  Yeah, I wouldn't call this "Mary Sue." I wouldn't even call it "Cliche'." Lily, you just caught a nut this time.

  Author's response

  why thank u...my argument to why the rating system sucks :P
  
  

• Truth

  (#) Rous 2006-11-27

  MWAHAHAHAHAHA! mary sue! I like that. You have my other review, but I could not resist the "mary sue". To quote Hermione,
  "What. An. Idiot!"
  
  Love it. Please, write some more mary sues. wipes tears from her eyes Sorry, this is just too much. Love that rating system. Every idiot can now click a button and be a literary critic. The bane of writers everywhere. Go back over to AP where at least the reviews are real. Later.

  Author's response

  hehe...ur review made me laugh...a lot...and i appreciate the irony of the mary sue writing...and yes Hermione always knows :P
  
  
  and yes i shall post all my poems at AP and fictionpress...seeing how that's where i really write :P
  
  later days...
  
  and yes i shall write some more mary sues =]

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