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aah...but what is the truth about love? please r/r!
- Again, a nice post. Your thoughts are coherent and concise. If you are going to capitalize the first word of the sentence, though, you need to follow through and do all of them.
"...the truth that leaves me
to quake and quiver at my knees..."
I am not sure "leaves" is the best word here. "leaves me quaking and quivering..." or "causes me to quake and quiver...". It is a subtle difference, but one, nonetheless.
"The longiness to tell
The word should be "longing".
Other than these few things, another good write.
Thank you for sharing.
Author's responseahh...thanks for the grammatical mistakes caught there...sometimes i just dont captalize words :P
but thanks for the tips :)
- MWAHAHAHAHAHA! mary sue! I like that. You have my other review, but I could not resist the "mary sue". To quote Hermione,
"What. An. Idiot!"
Love it. Please, write some more mary sues. wipes tears from her eyes Sorry, this is just too much. Love that rating system. Every idiot can now click a button and be a literary critic. The bane of writers everywhere. Go back over to AP where at least the reviews are real. Later.
Author's responsehehe...ur review made me laugh...a lot...and i appreciate the irony of the mary sue writing...and yes Hermione always knows :P
and yes i shall post all my poems at AP and fictionpress...seeing how that's where i really write :P
and yes i shall write some more mary sues =]