Dumbledore thinks that something drastically must happen in order to win the fight against Voldemort ... and he finds an ancient disease, which turns the three victims into walking bombs ... he inf...
- "Since 845, a large house stood on this site, when a religious centre for Cistercian monks was built."
Neat trick since the Order formed in 1098. We won't go into the misuse of titles. Such little things disrupt the flow of a story line.
Author's responseOk, ok. Thanks for pointing the things out for me. I am looking for a better beta, who is able to work fast enough.
That sentence looked great to me.
I take your review and use it to make the stories better, and less irritating for those who see those things.
Thanks for the review.